Thought I'd go ahead and leave a review on this today. Just a preface: I realize this is entirely satire and that you don't necessarily think all or even most Republicans think these sorts of things. Also, unlike previous reviewers, I actually like it short - get in and get out with your joke before it gets old.
With that being said, this could be far better. Frankly, although the fairy tale spin is new, this is old, tired satire that I've seen dozens, if not hundreds of times. Oh look, the racist, sexist, in fact (to borrow a word) deplorable Republicans who want all women to stay in the kitchen and hate minorities. Who excuse rape if the woman was "provocatively dressed." This is pretty much the entire basis of the Democratic campaign against Trump, and I hear this in some form about right-wingers nearly every day.
So. Be inventive. Look deeper. Make new connections, thing of things you haven't seen before, things that aren't parroted so often, the things you can't find in cute little posts on Facebook. Yes, the fairy-tale dressing is new (and I really do like it as an idea), but that doesn't excuse the unimaginative societal commentary.
I didn't find the Little Red Riding Hood story very funny, although the other two were because of the timing of the joke. I think it just needs a little reworking - that one doesn't feel like it has a punchline, aside from general absurdity, whereas the other two definitely do.
We now digress into my personal opinion and a wider discussion than just this work. Feel free to disregard it if you don't want to expand your style in the way I propose.
There is another way you could do better, set yourself apart from the general trend, and that is, honestly, to not satirize Republicans in this divisive way. To clarify, I'm not saying that I find this sort of thing inherently bad or wrong, or that people shouldn't satirize political parties. However, in today's political climate, I feel that this sort of satire is not needed and is even harmful - and not just to Republicans.
Let me explain. This is how Republicans feel: that they are being demonized. They are all being lumped together in the basket of "deplorables," called racist and sexist and every other character attack the left-wing media can think to throw at them regardless of whether or not it applies. These are people from all walks of life, (including women and minorities!) many of whom are struggling, and they keep being told they're privileged and/or terrible people because of the way they vote. Regardless of why they vote that way. Regardless of what their actual views are on any topic. For example, yes, some people want to crack down on immigration because they're racist. Many, many others, however, are desperately trying to find a job and all they can see is thousands of jobs being taken by people who aren't supposed to be here.
I'm not trying to say all this is correct - this is just how these people feel. And I believe this is why so many Republicans side with Trump: because they're fed up. They're tired of not being listened to, they're tired of being called terrible people when they're not, and so they want a revolution.
Anyway, so that's why I don't think this sort of satire is what's needed today. Even though I *know* this is satire, I can't help but feel that little more ostracized, that little more unheard when I read things like this, and I'm not even strictly Republican. In another time, it wouldn't matter. But right now, I think it does.
So what could you do? Don't give up satire - but maybe change your messages slightly. If you satirize just one group, you could pick more harmless stereotypes. Like a Republican that owns twenty guns or something (though that one's also a cliche) and let us laugh at it. Not in a "oh, this guy is so stupid and ignorant" way but a "look at all the funny things he does" way. Same if you want to satirize Democrats. In general, stay away from attacks on character and stick to attacks on their policies, i.e. the types of changes they generally vote for. Also, it's never a bad idea to throw in a few jabs at whoever you're *not* satirizing at the time.
For example, this is pretty much my favorite political satire ever. It takes plenty of jabs at both sides and doesn't attack character, but makes lots of good points about the policies of both sides. It's also really funny. (It was released a few years ago, so not really anything about current events.)
Anyway, I'll stop rambling now. Again, these are all just my opinions, and take or leave what you want from them. I'm not trying to tell you you have to change. I think you have a lot of potential as a writer (my favorite part of this was "without the crop-tops" because I'm a girl that does prefer modesty, and you didn't frame it as "oppressing women", so it was just funny.) Good luck with future endeavors, and keep writing!
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