Hi there, OreosAreLife and DivergentDemigod, I'm here for a review on review day~
I am just so full of happiness after reading this poem. I am so excited for the day in the far future when you will get the chance to look back at old writing, see this poem, and remember how happy you were to have found each other. It feels like a journal entry, and I'm sure you'll love it.
As a poet, what I really love to see in poems is imagery, and journal entries generally don't have a lot of imagery, so I wasn't able to find a lot in this poem. But what I did find I really enjoyed. You mentioned at one point being a misplaced stanza in an unfinished poem -- I can feel the emotion of not only not finishing a poem (why? too much emotion? not able to get it to words? to apathetic to keep trying?) but also misplacing the stanza (why? doesn't it belong? is it poorly written? can I not see where it really belongs). These emotions give me a way to connect with your narrative, even though I'm neither one of you and haven't made a new best friend.
The other moment I really loved was the line about getting to know someone slowly, like the way humans got to know the stars. I think about that a lot lately, how science was just built on people taking the time to observe the world around them and record what they saw. In friendship, that same calmness and lack of rush is a beautiful image, and I appreciate that it's included.
I hope these thoughts are helpful to both of you. If you have any questions or comments about this review, though, feel free to PM or reply!
Thanks for sharing,
Hannah
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