Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and mature content.
Once upon a time in the land of Grundo, there was this talking personified bear. Sweet, right? Truly awesome.
But, he was a very sad talking personified bear. Sad right? Truly deploring.
There was no one else like him! Have you ever wondered where you come from? Well, multiply that by like a gazillion for Teddy Ruxpin (which is the talking personified bear I'm talking about).
But then, one day, he met Grubby! Grubby was not a bear. Grubby was this huge caterpillar with lots of legs! Like Teddy, Grubby did not know where he came from. He was also always a very hungry caterpillar.
The two became fast friends. Then one day, they found not only this awesome treasure map, but an even more sweet AIRSHIP. A freakin' airship. Like in Super Mario Bros. 3, but cooler and less pixelated.
And that begins our story!
~~~~Sorry I'm posting this out of order! I just realized that I forgot to do a prologue! And you always need a prologue~~~~
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Hello Nate!
This sounds pretty interesting! One thing I didn't get though: The rating. Why is it too mature? And I don't see any profanity. Just a little side note, I will probably come back to this, read the following chapters. I'm pretty sure that it's going to be one heck of a story. Can't wait to see more of it.
~Kelpies.
As I was reading this I was hearing a very enthusiastic old British narrator in my head. I don't know why. But I liked it.
I really like this and certainly will read more. I like how it seems like a children's book, sort of, but directed at older people at the same time. And it made me laugh. Especially the airship bit.
Good job, sir.
Need more tildes. Excuse the bump. I'm working on something.
All right then. No wonder we don't see more Nate originals. (I'm kidding; please don't sue me.)
At work we call the tilde a 'slop' because we use it in our search expressions to move a few words out each way and that's a process known as 'slopping'. But- we've recently taken on a few 'students' (they're older than me) and so as not to confuse them they're now snakes. I am very confused. I miss the days when a tilde was a tilde.
You are too nice
Herrow.
I hate prologues.
Oobing innit
Stories <3
BOO