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Dream

by Natasha


[Verse 1]
I thought I was broken, but my mind still believes
that I will get warm some time, with my hands up my sleeves
I thought I would hurt you, but you're the one that leaves
Surrounded by the smoke of a burning dream

Maybe you want me to wait, maybe you don't
Maybe you'll send me away, maybe you won't
Maybe you'll ask me what I'll do when you're gone
Maybe you'll lie one more time to say I'm the only one

[Pre-chorus]
But I'll survive

[Chorus 1]
I won't let you bring me down with words that you don't mean
I won't let you judge me by the things you've never seen
Now my head's a mess and my heart's ripped out
But that's not stopping me
If all goes up in smoke, I just dream

[Verse 2]
I'll dream of a land far away, that's where I'll begin
I'll dream of a mountain to climb, or a river to swim
I'll dream of all the things I'll do when you're gone
I'll embrace my freedom and I'll shine like the sun

[Pre-chorus]
Yeah, I'll survive

[Chorus 2]
I won't let you bring me down with words that you don't mean
I won't let you judge me by the things you've never seen
Now my head's a mess and my heart's ripped out
But that's not gonna stop me
If all goes up in smoke, I just dream
Just dream

[Verse 3, ending]
I thought you would heal me, but that's not what I need
'cause all that you want from me, is too watch me bleed
Now, if I get distracted and you're all that I can see
I'll take my thoughts away by another dream.


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Wed Jun 10, 2015 7:44 pm
dogsrule5 wrote a review...



I am a big fan of music, and love reading others lyrics. I thought this was really good. This is a good song that people will love. Of course, I don't know the real tune, but I kind of made my own up in my head of how it will go. I thought that it was just amazing, and that you should really write more songs.

This song shows to me, that you might be more independent and don't need a girlfriend/boyfriend to make you happy. You just need you and you imagination, so you can dream.

This song has a very good chorus. I think the chorus has very strong meaning because you explain how you feel if someone does/says this too someone else. You believe in yourself is what I'm trying to say. You show independence, and I like that about this song.

I like the third chorus. I just love how you say...

I thought you would heal me, but that's now what I need
'cause all that you want from me is too watch me bleed


I think I like this part particularly, because sometimes it takes a lot to know what you want from a girl/guy. What I mean is that in this song, you know right away that this girl/boy is being mean to you, and just sitting there watching you look like a loser, and I'm trying to say that you realize it.

Sorry if some of this doesn't make since, because it does to me. Sorry if I worded something wrong. If you need to understand more of what I'm trying to say, then either reply to this review or send me a P.M about it! Thanks.

Again I really like your song, and I think it has lots of meaning.
Please write more songs!

Keep up the good writing,
Love,
Dogs




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Sun Jun 07, 2015 8:54 pm
Lael wrote a review...



This seems like a song that gives off a sense of independence.

On the second line of verse 3, "too" needs one less "o" in it. Also, the last line is a little confusing. Are you trying to say "I'll take my thoughts away with another dream" or something else? I don't exactly understand what you mean here.

Also, is the stanza after verse 1 part of that verse or are they a separate group? (All of the rest of the verses only have 1 stanza.)

Good luck!




Natasha says...


Ah thanks! Didn't notice these things. The first verse has two stanza's. Perhaps you'll understand if you hear the music:
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Wed Jun 03, 2015 9:36 pm
Snoops says...



Lau here for a review.
First: put a comma behind the sentece you want a pause. It helps to take a breath for the readers.
Second: this was great! I loved the song.
"Surrounded by the smoke of a burning dream" was my favourite line. I feel like that sometimes, Anyway, great job!





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