Young Writers Society

Hello there Natasha!

So let's just get down to it. Honestly, I can't offer you any constructive critique on this because I didn't find anything wrong with this write at all. But I will say this. I think this is a very cool song and I'm glad that you made it about a personal experience. Although, it might have happened differently to you, I can relate to this kind of thing and it is a very frustrating predicament to be in. I will be visiting your facebook page to hear the music. I'm really curious as to how the musical composition came out. Nice work here and have a very nice afternoon. -IceWinifredd

P.S. I wish you good luck in your music and any other activities that you are or will endevour in.

Hello there Natasha! The Silent Bagpipe here to review some of your work! First off let me just warn you that I am not a very good reviewer, my mind doesn't seem to pick out those itty bitty details that need fixing. Plus, I am just getting back into the mode of reviewing after my long break of reviewing nothing, so I may be a bit rusty.

Your song was amazing, let me just say. You expressed yourself very well, and from the eyes of someone who is the "third wheel" I am sure everybody can relate to this poem in one way or another. Being able to see a part of you, or a part of someone else who is close to you, in a song is one of the things that makes everyone love them. Lyrics mean the world to people. It is said that people often will listen to songs when they feel strongly related to the lyrics.

When I first read your song, it reminded me of Taylor Swift's song "Tear Drops on my Guitar" . I myself, am not a big fan of Taylor. I like some of her older music though.

My personal favorite line of yours was these ones-
"When I walk with you, I feel like I'm a reader
A mystery has never seemed so fun
But then you turn around and you see her
Suddenly she's the only one"

I found it very creative, I liked the way you described it. I can also relate to this part of the song. Good job with your work! It was very well done!

Keep writing!

~The Silent Bagpipe ....a.k.a. Selina

Hi! This song makes a pretty nice story.

The only thing I can see that might need more clarification is the parts where you talk about your friend. I don't exactly understand what it means when you say "You can just be yourself." What is he doing so that he seems like another person? Maybe you could tweak the lines a bit near the beginning to make it more clear.

Good luck with your situation. Keep up the good work!