I used to get jealous
Of those girls
Who smile more
Than I do.
Those girls are just
Irritating like little lizards
Near my bed.
I wish I was a princess
And not a poet.
-so that people
would be
nice to me-
(I'm Josephine
And I'm just fine-)
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Hi!
I really like this. This is a very relatable piece, I especially love;
However the grammar is making me a bit confused (I'm not much of a poet so it could be a thing sorry if this is the case). There is
I think this is fine because its poetic, but then I find it everywhere? I'm not sure.
But overall the content is a beautiful thing and such a real message - good job!
I relate to this so much, you have no idea
Im half writing this because I need points and half writing this because im actually interested in what you wrote. This is my first review so bear with my im trying. Reading it I can tell you think lowly about yourself, maybe like you think your not as good as other girls. I dont know anything about you but I feel what your writing. "I wish I was a princess and not a poet" thats good writing, it tells people so much about you in such a short amount of words. Im sorry for ehat your going through if this isint a fictional story, loneliness hurts, I know I feel lonely too. Just keep writing, poets are smarter than princesses. Just maybe try to compare yourself to the "prettier" girls" less because that won't make anything better.
This is quite beautiful, and sounds like a diary entry, or a letter (not sure if you meant to do this.)
This is so relatable, knowing that even though you're just trying to do something you love, it's not considered "Normal" to society.
This is also a feeling that is all too familiar. Seeing other people smiling, happy, as you fade deeper into the shadows, becoming invisible.
This poem is great, a definitely captures the feeling of being invisible.
Amazing job, keep up the good work!