Fear
Of
Missing
Out
FOMO
.
I
Had
Never
Experienced
Fomo
IHNEF
.
Parties are loud,
And books are nice
Friends are good
But I prefer writing
if I wasn’t invited
Maybe I just wasn’t meant to come
PAFBIM
.
At a party I was invited to
I met you
You liked books and writing and so much more
I got your number
We talked
And talked
But never enough
AIYIWAB
.
Then I heard you were at a party
I wasn’t invited too
And I felt a new feeling
Not FOMO
I could care less about the other people there,
I could miss the games and food
TIANII
.
Fear
Of
Missing
You
FOMY
.
Fear
Of
Missing
Out
On
You
FOMOOY
.
It’s hard to explain
I
.
Listening to you never gets old
Or maybe it’s because you never get tired of listening to me
Very little of the world I love
Except when I see it through you
LOVE
.
Yearning to never miss out
Once never affected me
Until I met you
YOU
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Aw, this is so sweet! Hope any of this goes well.
(not doing a review just wanted to say that)
Haha, thanks, this poem isn't a perfect analogue for my current situation, but it's close XD.
This one is interesting. You gave us a lot of raw feelings. The thought you wanted to portray is great, we get a glimpse of who you were and why it is unusual that you even expierienced FOMO. We see how the love affected you. I see this poem as good look into the narrators character and world, but I think it lacks style. I believe you did it intentionally, but I wouldn’t say it really works. You rely on the editing and summing up the letters of each stanza by it’s end. That’s a terrific idea but most of the time the letters combined don’t mean anything, it becomes chaotic. I think that a poem should work without any editing, it needs to have a content that stands on it own. The way you wrote this poem, it could very well be just a short monologue if it wasn’t edited like that. There is not much poetic language or effort to achieve it. I ain't here to bash you, you got emotion, all I suggest is that you tame it with the right language.
Haha, thanks, I get you, I'm crap at poetry, better at monologing. Really, all the poetry i write is just monologue in weird style, but maybe i should try branching out and writing some real poetry XD.
I admit, it probably would have been more poetic if I tried for making all the Acrynomes words, but i was trying to make them senseless acronyms like fomo. And then out of the chaose rises the one phrase, like nothing else besides that makes sense.
Like, the narrator's thoughts are jumpled when he's talking about other things. But when he talked about her it begins to make sense, and he says the thing he couldn't bring himself to say directly
I'll keep that in mind when writing future poems though! Thanks a ton for the review.
Hey!
Wow! This poem is great! Your title really caught my eye. I also liked your style, short and to the point, but deep.
I think the "too" should be "to"
Also, I think "effected" should be "affected" in this line:
I really like this line:
I really like how you put the first letters of all the lines in a stanza in a meaningful acrostic. Especially the last three stanzas, when you spell "I LOVE YOU". That was beautiful! <3
On the whole, it's a lovely poem. I can't wait to read more of your work.
Keep writing.
Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you liked it!
I'll make those changes!