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Should be "cries".
"Sadness" is misspelled here.
This poem is very plain, for lack of a better word. Sadness is such a powerful emotion, but rather than explore some poignant situations and types of sadness, you stated them, and the stating without imagery or poetic device made the situations sound so impersonal, as if they were more clinical observations than types of sadness that were actually felt.
Rather than just tell us what sadness is, show us what it's like to be a particular kind of sad. Simile, metaphor, and figurative language are your best friends when it comes to showing things, and you really need to do more showing, less telling, especially in poetry.
There are a couple of articles in the Knowledge Base section of the site that deal with poetic devices which you can find here: viewforum.php?f=152 Suzanne's article on writing Emotional Poetry is one I highly recommend in this case.
Good poetry does more than just tell us about something; it shows us what something is and lets us feel it for ourselves. If you can capture that in your own poems, you'll be golden.