Miss You

I liked how poetic and beautiful your poem sounded. The way your character talks about missing someone and how they want that person to come back but will probably will never come back, made me feel moved for the person longing for the person that they love. My favorite part of your poem was the part where the character mentions how they do not want their love to go away and that this other person is the reason why their love stays. Up until the line "Your happiness is always worth it though." I liked this because the character is putting the happiness of the person that they love ahead of their own, and that shows compassion.

If I had to make any changes, and I'm stretching it, because I don't really see that it needs to be changed all that much, here is where I would make a few. First, I am not entirely clear on what kind of relationship the main character had with this love? How established was their love? I'm assuming it's a romantic love, but I'm not sure. I know that the person felt deeply for this person that they are writing about, but what was the level of their relationship? Second, what is the relationship between the main character, and the "he" person? Again, it's really not too big of a deal. I get the overall feeling of this poem, and it's that longing for a person that can't really find complete happiness without this love, but will do their best to live their life anyway. Good job and I look forward to reading other poems from you.

I loved this poem the moment I read it. You have really captured so many emotions here. There is pain of rejection, nostalgia, even a little underlying reproach and bitterness( for example the line: you say no one could take my place|but he does every day”), but overall I think, what this poem reveals is nobility of spirit, even in the most desolate moments. The speaker of the poem is both mature enough and loves the other person enough to realize, that despite their heartbreak, this person is actually doing better without them. There’s a lot of courage in this poem. Another thing I loved was the sound of this poem. It felt more like a ballad or song even than a poem actually ( I don’t know whether you would ever consider putting it to music?). It flows beautifully and what I really admired was the way you let the lines rhyme without making it sound trite or Doctor Seussish. However with all this in mind I think the pinnacle was the last line - strong and simple, it really got to the point. If poetry is the essence of meaning, you achieved it with this poem.