Young Writers Society

Hey, Rosewood here! 🌹

It's been a few months since I've reviewed, so sorry if it's not the most helpful. Anyway, let's get started!

First of all, I just want to say that I love the main concepts you're pointing out. In my own interpretation, I can see how you've combined acts of human nature and paired them our own understanding of morality.

People crush sunflowers

too large to fit

in a jean pocket.

Honestly, this has to be my one of favorite stanzas in this. You address the fact that we, as a group, tend to destroy what we can't have. Which is kind of funny, considering how in the next few lines you give the impression of dismissing the underlining meanings. (Another thing, I might add, that people will do to dismiss jealousy in what they cannot possess!)

It's no big deal, I'll assure you

every time at the

ritualistic crossing of the street

with the red fire hydrant.

I think it's interesting how you coupled something easily compared to making choices in life with something out of the blue in the last line. Interpretation-wise, this really leaves it up to your reader. It could be anything- a thought the narrator did not consider, a difference in the mundane, a simple way to ground the reader in reality...!

But sometimes I think you expect

what you're not willing to give.

Sometimes I think you lie

when you say you've given anything.

I like the message I'm receiving from this, perhaps rethinking choices or lies that we tell ourselves? I only have one small nit-picky thing I'd like to add. I thought the rhythm was a little weird on the last line, "...when you say you've given anything.". Perhaps, instead of "you've", "you would've" could be better. It helps to hold the tense the sentence mainly portrayed.

I like the last lines and how they helped revert back to the sort of vegetation aspect you started with. And I especially like how they both wind back to the central point. You left us with an extra line in the last verse, which at first, I focussed on too much at the surface-level. But having read the poem multiple times, I think it creates, at least for me, a connection that better yet defines humanity's actions. We're never sure how it will affect us or what the consequences may be, but the practice itself helps to define who we are as individuals.

I really hope my interpretations weren't too philosophical for this, but your work really helped paint the ideas in my mind! This was a beautiful piece, and I can't wait to read more of your works in the future!

Keep writing!

Hey, Liminality!
Here's a short review for you today!

People crush sunflowers

too large to fit

in a jean pocket.

Nice imagery in this opening!

It's no hidden subtext,

I think it's interesting that you say that there's no hidden meaning and yet you go on in the poem and look deeper into the meaning of the flower.

You grow vines connecting the wrong dots,

forcing me to think in fragments,

I really liked these lines for it's word choice of "fragments" and the use of connecting dots.

Anyways, nice poem and keep on writing!