I am a buzzing outline of a person
floating down the streets,
edited in later to look like
faces, hair - blond, brown, black, and
auburn and platinum and diamond
rings on some of my fingers.
I am cloud-matter synthesised
by the plastic fibres of the mind,
I am spots in the edge of the vision
when you're running from something
you can't quite put a word to.
.
I am society, the featureless crowds,
which laugh and cry as suits
the storyboard's narrative.
I am hatred and fear, but whose
sweat? and whose rolling tears?
Questions that shiver like sunlight,
and fearing duct-tape-tight censorship
the director neglects to suggest answers.
.
The thing is,
normal people fear
what they do not understand
and dear child,
so do you.
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Oh gosh this is amazing!
The first part is pretty and weird -but in the good way that leaves a small chill down your round-up i knew I was gonna enjoy this the second i read the first line its just 👌 amazing!
The second part is sad-ish with hints of something dark that makes me shiver
And the third part is true but also creepy the 'so do you ' is just sjdjdhdnd!!!!!!! I love it!!!
Thanks for the review!
You are absolutely positutlely awesome!
Thank you for sharing this, really!
And wow, the last part is so powerful:
“The thing is,
normal people fear
what they do not understand
and dear child,
so do you.”
The “so do you” part stood out the most. This ACTUALLY makes readers think, because they discover how this is directed to this.
Your narrative is AMAZING. Especially here:
“ I am a buzzing outline of a person
floating down the streets,
edited in later to look like
faces, hair - blond, brown, black, and
auburn and platinum and diamond
rings on some of my fingers.
I am cloud-matter synthesised
by the plastic fibres of the mind,
I am spots in the edge of the vision
when you're running from something
you can't quite put a word to.”
Thank you so much! Virtual hugs!
-AilahEvelynMae
Thanks for the review, and virtual hugs to you as well!