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I Need You

by LilPWilly


You hurt me inside

But you fill up my life

I’ve been thinking someday

That I’d make you my wife

Now is it to late

Or should I still try

Cause you’re leaving Saturday

So I’m not gonna lie

.

There’s things I should’ve told you since the day that we met

Every night I pray to heaven that together we’ll get

And I need you more than ever cause I’m stuck in my head

If not as a lover than at least as a friend

.

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

.

I'm always copy pasting words when I write a new song

It’s the stuff I meant to say to you but now you are gone

I miss the stuff we used to do and feelings you brought

But mostly just how much I loved you, with all of my heart

Ohh

.

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

.

Did you know your friend is jealous and he’s saying you lied

That that look you always gave me, it was just a disguise

That you were hiding how you hate me and that every single smile

Was just out of pity but I saw light in your eyes

.

Tell me the truth

Cause not knowing is worse

I can’t move on

Until I know for sure

I wanna get going

But I’m stuck in reverse

And I’m running outta gas

In this one person hearse

.

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

I need you


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Tue Mar 23, 2021 3:17 am
meloncalling wrote a review...



Wow, this is amazing song! I can almost hear the person calling out to their lover. I tend to visualize when I read a work, and these lyrics painted a definitive picture in my head. I followed the story in my head, and made up small details for myself.

Your writing shows the path of the heartbroken singer, longing for a past love. I thruroughly enjoyed this.

I do not have any criticisms, actually! To me, this is a solid song!




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Mon Mar 22, 2021 6:24 pm
ForeverYoung299 wrote a review...



Hello. Here for a review.

Now is it to late

Or should I still try

Cause you’re leaving Saturday

So I’m not gonna lie

Maybe, for the first line,you could write
Now it is too late
I think it seems better and for the second line, put a question mark.

There’s things I should’ve told you since the day that we met

There are things.

Did you know your friend is jealous and he’s saying you lied

Put a question mark after lied.

I need you

Woah

I need you

So don’t leave me

Cause I need you

I need you

I need you


Although repeating is good but repeating it three times doesn't seem to fit.

Overall, it was a smooth poem. Loved it. Keep writing




LilPWilly says...


Thanks!




I would rather die of passion than of boredom.
— Émile Zola