Young Writers Society

WOW! I’m speechless, this was amazing. But I’m gonna give you an actual review, or atleast try to!
First of all, the story is beautiful. Thank you for sharing it with us. The lyrics have a very 70s feel to them, do you listen to a lot of 70s music? The song reminds me of something I’d hear on a Hollies record.
I will say, I wish you had broken it up into stanzas. It’s hard to separate the verses from the chorus and bridge.
But that’s the only thing I have against this. Great job! Keep creating! God loves you!

This is so good! I could feel every word you wrote! When it becomes a song I need to hear it!

This part was my favorite! It's so deep.

"I’m coming back to you

Because I can’t forget how it felt to hold your hand

In the cold, in the rain, on that cross-country train

I need to feel you again

I’m coming back to you"

*crying*

This is so beautiful - you are a very talented songwriter! Made me cry 😢 Keep writing

Hey Alice is here to give a review!!!

I really like the theme used in the poem, it was heartfelt and well written. There are full of emotions in the poem and I can feel it. Your word selections for this poem was amazing.

Suggestions:

Some small suggestions from me that will make this poem a bit more better.

I met you on the night I ran away

You knew exactly what to say

Maybe because you felt the same way

I loved you for a day

You’ll know that together is where we’re supposed to be

The same as every dream that I’ve had since that evening back when we were seventeen

You’ll know that together is where we’re supposed to be

The same as every dream that I’ve had

Since that evening back

When we were seventeen

I still remember your young eyes

I still remember your young smile

It’s been a while

Are we still so juvenile?