Oh, wow. That ending was just... Wow. That was really well done, and well timed.
I really enjoyed how you wrote this. It was a simple idea executed perfectly. Delivering it's message clean and swift.
One thing that I will note in the line, "Cole was happy to have so many new friends! Then again, there was always something about Cole that gave off the feeling he wasn't really happy"
I think this line could be reworded a bit, as the first sentence is directly telling us that he's happy, and the second line implying that he isn't. Perhaps if you used words like 'should've' or a phrase like 'he thought he would feel-' it might convey your meaning a little better.
Other than that, really good job! That was an awesome read! Keep on writing!
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