Hello! I’ll review your poem too.
First of all, as niteowl said below, this is quite hard to review as it is in an image. For example, you cannot copy/paste lines to quote them. I also agree that although some poems need to be uploaded in an image of the format is important, but here the format doesn’t seem to be very important. Unless, of course, the background image is of importance, though I don’t really understand how this background image could be important towards the poem.
Although I do like this poem and the interesting concept of it, I feel like it would be more interesting if it explored why they were going to a party, what happened at the party, why they left the party early etc.
I’d also like to say that also the rhyming does make it sound more natural, there are places in the poem where words seem forced because of it.
Obviously, this is all just my opinion, so you have the right to listen to none of it. I hope this helped, and keep writing brilliant and interesting poems!
Points: 1798
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