PASSION!

Radrook here once more to provide feedback in order to help others write better. All my advice is intended to be helpful and not annoying. But if I offend in some way my apologies I offer beforehand. Typos might be due to my lazy eye that causes me to see two keyboards and make hand eye coordination difficult. That having been said:

Thanks for sharing this poem about the emotion called passion which in this case seems to be referring to a strong enthusiasm about something. Passion is compared to a drug that makes a person high and gives the person the idea that he or she cannot be stopped. That is indeed a good comparison since it hints at an irrationality which passion can indeed inflict on a person. In short, it can make a person so irrational that he actually believes himself undefeatable.

Such a passion can prove costly just as being high on drugs can prove costly by making a person take risks that he otherwise would not take were he less enthusiastic. Some people on drugs have been known to jump off high buildings in the belief that they can fly. Others have been machined-gunned down in Bonsai charges during in the Pacific War.

I once had to personally intervene when the small drunk fellow was challenging this sober bigger fellow to a fight because he felt he could take him. Only with great difficulty was I able to avoid his getting beaten to a pulp. So passion can be like a two edged sword, it can aid us in reaching realistic reachable goals or make us plow ahead into disaster.



Suggestion

Even in the darkness you allow them to see.

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Addendum

The philosopher Georg Wilhelm Friedrich Hegel once stated:

Nothing great in the world has ever been accomplished without passion.

The word passion comes from the Greek word paskho which means to suffer. It is now used to refer to an intense emotion that involves a desire or enthusiasm for something. To say that somebody is passionate about something is often meant in a positive sense. In fact lack of passion can be a common reason for why people will fail at a project. When people are passionate it means that they are motivated and willing to go the extra mile to achieve their goal. If people feel a lack of passion for any activity they will usually find it to be dull and tedious. If the individual has a passion for food it does not mean that they are doing anything wrong – they are engaging in something that is bringing them pleasure.
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