Like and Review (or Comment) if you enjoyed this Poetry. This work is also related with my previous Poetry Work, Mercury. I've decided taking a step further, and creating a Universe with releasing bits and pieces of lores through chapters. I will announce more in my other Poetry Works.
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I am the Cook,
I feed those who are hungry.
I give life and redeem those who are desperate,
I give charity to those who Society shun.
I am also a Warrior of Justice,
I shun the evil that cause harm to the innocent.
I will tell the reason why Selfishness is a crime,
I will teach others why Gluttony is a sin.
U as bjm Pndajqiu os Eernkahaqsy.
I know self-control and temperance is a virtue,
I know it is a rare characteristics only few humans have.
I justify the Children of Gluttony and Greed,
I feed them what makes them become the Children of Selfishness.
I question myself of my true job sometimes,
I wonder if what I'm doing is right.
I feed humans food and grant their wishes,
I also feed the Wicked quarrelsome delicacies.
Q cu tuq Bxqfm os Yatqrclnfiuv.
I do not remember my mundane past as a mortal,
I do not question it.
I should not be doing anything wrong as the Warrior of Justice,
I should not be feeling sentient from punishing the wicked.
I have a cellar which is filled with several ingredients,
I know some of them aren't from this Earth.
I have picture frames all over the cellar of mine,
I see it depicts me and a vaguely familiar man.
K im aaw xmommoqrovi ehb U as.
I question if I know him again,
I know we have both met.
I wonder how he is doing,
I cry because I don't know my motivation of life.
I tend to excuse justice as the pride of living,
I then realize justice is worthless of to the dead who already are judged.
I only feed people's mouths,
I do it to either detox or poison their tongues.
Q cu Hndito vpe Umro.
I am the Cook,
I am the Warrior of Justice.
I am the man who obtained temperance and self-control.
I am the Judge of the Living Humanity.
I am not a human,
I am neither a god.
I am a Paradigm,
I am the Pattern of Earth.
Q cu tuq pgzkih br tnm Girgt.
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Greetings! I have arrived from the land of Yosh to review this literary work!
In other words, let's get started!
A read-through of this the first time, I assumed it could be how the narrator is literally a cook, but on a second read, I think this is a metaphorical cook. Someone who gives charity and is generous, like in the first stanza. "I teach others why Gluttony is a sin." also points to the fact that this is slightly metaphorical. At least, I think it's metaphorical. This is a really interesting point, because, to be honest, I have never thought of cooks that way ^_^
Hm, so I put this through google translate, but I didn't get anything. Is this supposed to be a language or just simply gibberish?
Interesting. One would assume that gluttony, greed, and selfishness are negative virtues. The narrator mentioned being a 'warrior of justice', but this kind of contrasts with it. Or are the seperate stanza sections referring to different narrators?
So the narrator now feels almost remorseful about this "feeding into Children of Selfishness" and stuff? I like this stanza too, but I would suggest not using the word 'job' here. It's a bit too informal for your usual tone.
Oh . . . so the narrator is a god? Again, you contrast with some previous themes. You mention here that the narrator is 'punishing the wicked', but you also mentioned 'I justify the Children of Gluttony and Greed / I feed them what makes them become the Children of Selfishness'. I feel like something is off here. Maybe you are saying these from different narrations, because each stanza section is different from the one before.
I like how you repeat the first stanza! Also, your last stanza makes the poem make sense. "pattern of earth" is a nice touch. Makes me think the narrator is some kind of force of nature. Sometimes doing relatively negative things to the environment the narrator lives in, and sometimes positive. After all, no one can control the wrath of nature!
Anyways, I hope I interpreted this poem correctly. Hopefully I didn't sound like I was rambling.
-yosh
Dang, thank you for reviewing this poem! And yes, the narrator is... somehow god-like, although they aren't a god. And as for the "gibberish," it's in English, just... ciphered. And for the third stanza, the narrator is the same, they're just making the Children taste their own medicine.
Otherwise, thank you so much for the review!
And also fun fact: The first stanza actually was inspired by the mythology of the Hindu goddess Annapurna, so I guessed of having a character who helps... with a twist.