Down, Deep, Deep Down

There is a little dude hangin' out under that rock, by the way...Zoom in on the cover page.

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First Impression
I got a bit confused at first when I first read this poem until I got to the middle part. I believe this is supposed to be a conversation between a shark and bird, which is quite interesting. Judging from your picture, the bird is living under a rock near a river or a creek. It is safe to assume that the shark may be somewhere inside that creek. One of the things that threw me off was that this was patterned as a conversation, but I had to reread the poem to make sure that I was associating the correct stanzas with the correct characters. Perhaps it will be nice to add something like "BIRD: etc etc" so that people won't get too confused and first-time readers would wonder who on earth Bird and Shark are hahahah

Actual Review
So the actual review will just tackle my overall take on the poem. In the first stanza, I see it's the bird who's talking, saying how it is safe under the rock. I find it peculiar how it addresses the shark as "But you just stare down and frown." If the bird is somewhere safe, shouldn't it be above the shark? If it is below the shark and not dead yet, it means it's in a semi-closed rock underwater which may mean it could drown. If we're going to refer to the picture in the cover, I would go with my first take on it. Maybe it would be nice to change it to "But you just sit down and frown." It would be much more comical, but also a way to tell the readers that this poem is light-hearted. In the next few stanzas, we see the shark mocking the poor bird for not getting out of his comfort zone, unlike the others. The bird protests, saying that he is safe in the rock. At first, people may think that the bird is staying inside because of the shark, but the last few stanzas confirm that its simply just the bird's comfort space more than anything else, which is why it is staying there.

Reflection on Themes and Elements
If you haven't noticed with my other reviews, I tend to overanalyze so please forgive me if I go overboard HAHAHA

The most prominent element you use here is the titular phrase, "Down, deep, deep down". This means two things in my opinion. It can have a positive meaning. It could show that one is comfort with the beliefs they have down, deep, deep down. Just like how some Christians have faith that seems so deep, they are firm in their convictions and cannot be moved because their foundation is built deep deep down. However, it can mean something negative. One can be deep down in their faith or deep down in their sins or vices. Perhaps the shark is actually a friend. The bird just doesn't want to get out because it is his safe space and anyone that coerces him to get out is like an enemy. The shark persuades him to get out, because his other friends have escaped, but the bird sees it in a negative light and dismisses it.

For me, some prominent themes include the boundary between safety and going out of your comfort zone. It also involve themes of standing firm to your beliefs. Whether it's out of stubbornness or out of conviction, perhaps we will never know. One can only assume.

What the Work Reminds Me Of
Your work is similar to a children's story, especially those fables that teach lessons. The only difference is that the lesson here is not explicit. It is quite ambiguous and one can draw their own conclusion from it. People can use it to teach children to abstain from getting deep down into bad things or encourage their children to explore their beliefs and faith deep down. It can work both ways.

Summary
Overall, this is an interesting and wonderful poem! I'm glad to see you posting some pieces of poetry, a nice change to your posting of "I Know" hahahah (although I Know is great as well). Hope to see more poems from you!

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Hey Kaia,

its been a long time since I left a review for you. But no worries here I am again.
Who knew the dark mystery writer down, deep, deep, down had a soft spot for poetry, I am impressed by this poem.

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First of all, I think you absolutely nailed the description of nature. The title also says a lot on its own already and I love your use of Down, Deep, Deep, Down in there. You once again did a great job!

Secondly, Girl, I love the attitude towards Mr. Sharky!
<< Hope you dont mind me callin him that >>
Your little rhyme over there is nice. From Mock to Rock.

Lastly, IS the little guy from the cover talking in this poem. I have a feeling he is, because you said >>Its cosy and dark.

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Overall, I think this was a nice little poem getting so off grid. I think the cover was a brilliant choice, taking you got the inspiration from your cover. Absolutely wowsome. You are a great writer! Keep writing!

I kept it short, see ya friend!

Amazingly yours,
Rinisha

ps >> Try and get some inspiration from pinterest or watch youtube videos on doodle art, sometimes pictures or drawing help with creating a perfect scene.