Hi @KaiaJersaga
I'm here to leave you a review.
I have to say that your poem "A Spider's Place" is absolutely fantastic. From the title to the last line, you've created a beautiful, vivid picture of a spider's world. So let's go through the poem line by line.
"A fresh white petal"
This line is a great opening, creating a peaceful image in the reader's mind. It's as if we're in a garden, surrounded by beauty and nature. The word 'fresh' makes it feel new and exciting. It makes the reader wants to read on, that's nice.
"A small silver kettle"
At first I was confused by this line. But then I realised you're talking about the spider's web! The word 'kettle' is a creative and unexpected choice and makes the web sound cosy and homely. It's like the spider has his own little place in the world. Good job over there, Kaia!
"A web of lace"
This line is amazing! You've perfectly captured the intricate and delicate nature of a spider's web. The word 'lace' is very point. It's as if the spider is creating its own masterpiece.
"Clue to where the spider went"
This is so clever. It implies movement and action, as if the spider wasn't just sitting in its web. It's as if the spider has left a little breadcrumb trail for us to follow, adding a sense of intrigue and mystery to the poem.
Overall, your poem is stunning. The title is perfect - it's short and catchy, drawing the reader in. And each line is unique and beautiful, painting a vivid picture of the spider's world. Keep up the good work, Kaia!
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!
- Rinisha
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