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The Days of the Week

Monday the Condemned! Monday the Detested!

Far away seems the day when you were last well-rested!

Work is hoarded where your motivation is gone,

Yet you must endure this dusk to get to a dawn.

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Tuesday the blues-day, neither loved nor hated,

an epoch too early and too late to be rated.

insipid and flavorless is the fruit that this day brings,

but just take a bite, and get back in the swing of things.

~

Wednesday the summit, two down and two to go,

you're working harder now, you've gone to high from low.

The peak of the week, the peak of productivity,

closer to the end come each activity!

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Thursday the almost there, Thursday the second best!

With the promise of work tomorrow all favor is divest!

So though there is still the consent of night,

it's only now you see the dawn's first light!

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Friday the savior, granting freedom from duress,

some would say a holiday, so much better than the rest!

At the time your work is done happiness will be upon you,

you’ve fought your fights, waited your waits and the weekend will ensue!

~

Saturday the gift, your production falling takes a vertigo,

your idleness today will echo all of tomorrow!

So go relax! Kick back! You’ve been waiting for this all week,

but it is up to you to create the deliverance that you seek.

~

Sunday the nothing got done day this is the weekend’s weak end,

that of what you’ve sustained you must now apprehend.

Hold dear the memories and momentos of all your weekend fun,

for this evening will seem longer than all that you had done.

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Now this week is through, when is it will you ever learn,

two days will never amount to five days worth of yearn.

When you complain about the inevitable you are but wasting breath,

for once the week is done, you’re that much closer to inescapable death.

~

Acquire the silver-lining in everything that god here brings,

for every day grants a dawn, each one on different wings.

Recognize two days of vacation are not worth the arduous five,

live yourself in every day, and then you will surely be alive!

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JediDeadpool
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Wow, this poem I great!! I can't wait to kick it out of the green room and unleash it upon the world.

I haven't seen that many poems (compared to poems about other topics) about the days of the week, except a kids book my siblings love to read.
With each stanza, I was drawn further into this poem, and I enjoyed each of the days!
There was even a couple words I had never heard of; "Divest", and "duress". I looked them up, and am glad for them :P
I'm pretty impressed you stuck with it, and even had two stanza apart from just the days of the week.
The only nit-pick I have is the first line of the Sunday stanza. It seemed a little forced, but I quickly forgot about it after moving on

Thank you for reading, I'm ecstatic you enjoyed it!

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Ellesegar
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Hey it's Ellesegar, here to do a review.. So without further ado, let's begin.

So, let me just say I love this poem. It totally describes my week. It's amazing.

1st stanza, second line: take out the word "of"

2nd stanza, third line: take out the word "the"

4th stanza, fourth line: take out the

The reason why I say take out these, is because without these words, the poem flows a lot better. I would really suggest doing that though.

Overall, I loved it. A lot. Great, awesome, amazing job. You are an amazing writer, so keep on writing!

~Ellesegar~

Your criticism is welcome and I'm glad you enjoyed it, but I was hoping you could explain on the problem you saw in the 2nd stanza third line. Removing "the" doesn't make sense, I just need your perspective. Also on the fourth line of the fourth stanza I assume you meant the word "can"?



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