I like Billy guy. I like how his name sounds. I named him. It doesn’t really rhyme and it’s kind of annoying, but that’s what I like though.
I’m going down to my basement. Billy’s there, waiting for me. One more thing that I like about him – he’s always there for me. Isn’t that lovely? Oh, and he is not a guy, he’s a grown man, about twenty five years or so.
The most beautiful thing about Billy is that – he’s dead.
I’m in my basement. Lamp lights his head, making his face look even more white than usual. He sits on an old chair of mine. I made that chair in my childhood.
- Hey Billy!
I see blood stains on his mouth. His head is thrown back. I killed him couple of days ago. I didn’t torture him much… at least when he was alive.
- I’ve had a great day.
A fly sits on his eyelid. He’s face represents death, despair at its maximum. I have done a good job. I’m proud for him, for myself and… I don’t know, it makes me happy.
- You know that girl I told you about?
His mouth is open and the fly goes in his throat.
- You do remember her name, right?
The fly flies away. Blood from his mouth makes its way to the shirt. I liked his white shirt, it smelled really nice. I like everything clean.
- Okay. Her name is Amanda. Man… she’s beautiful.
The fly flies between us and smashes into the lamp.
- Yeah that’s the one, she lives across the street. You remember!
I shouldn’t doubt Billy. I don’t really know him, we met a week ago, but I sense good people.
- She has black hair. Yeah, almost like yours.
I have just noticed , that he has really good, black hair.
- So I met her at the market. She was searching for the milk section and I already had milk in my basket. She asked for my help. We chatted a little bit about our neighborhood and so on.
Billy is a good listener. Why haven’t I met him earlier?
- And… she invited me over. I’m pretty nervous about it. I mean… you know what I’m saying, right?
The fly is running all over his head. The other one appears from somewhere and they start communicating with each other.
- I’m just saying to myself: You’ll go there, drink tea or coffee or whatever, act a bit funny, bit serious. Chat with her. And in the end maybe you will get a kiss or something.
The flies are flying around his eyes.
- I like kissing a woman. …Who doesn’t? Yeah, you got that right.
I like way he listens to me - Silent. His silence speaks for me more than anyone’s reply.
- Oh, and that old woman, who lived on our street – I killed her. I still have her blood curdling scream in my ear. I don’t know why I killed her like that but, she deserved it. Now police are all around. They’ll probably come in and look around, so I have to hide you for a while. I already dug a grave.
I see his grateful eyes. He feels a bit clumsy, but I will always take good care of friends.
- Come on Billy…
I grabbed him.
- We’re going to my car. You do like to take a walk, don’t you?
My best friend.
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I hope I don't get banned or something. And I don't want you guys to think that I'm kind of a psychopath that conversates with corpse in a basement...
.. well, not every day I do, but... you know...
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O.O It's one of those few rare perspectives where irrationality seems so easily rational and the morals of the readers intervene to secure sanity. It's refreshing in it's own grotesque way. The Narrator sort of strikes me as like Dexter without a mindset or an ultimate goal but I haven't read all of it yet so I can't exactly judge that. Quite an interesting read you've made and I'd like to see how your story will progress.
Now this was fun to read. A bit pointless but still fun.

The way it was written was really cool to me, and you described the... flies... pretty well.
All in all very nice one! Keep it up
I wouldn't ban you for posting something written in the perspective of a psychopath. It's kind of refreshing to read something like this once in a while. Keep it up.
(I wasn't intending to review this, but there was only one thing that made me a bit uncomfortable when reading this: the use of dashes instead of quotation marks. And also that giant gap between "for" and "my.")