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Another great episode. I think I'm starting to get the plot, and I'm looking forward to finding out what's going to happen.
But, what's lube? Is it American or something, 'cause I've never heard of it.
This is great! I'm loving the character of Sunshine more and more and the plot is looking promising with the added competition from Harvey Lions. I think you could maybe have Mr Harris sound a little more bitter and patronising and yet be increasingly eager to sell them the printers, maybe even show the bargaining of the price down.
My favourite part is the end, the suspense is great and I'm looking forward to seeing what Jeremy is going to do. It's going to be a tough decision and I sure wouldn't want to make it.
You have a wonderful sense of humour, Brad. Can't wait to read more.
Mm, baking soda for breakfast is my FAVE-UH-RIT. With gay bars on the side, please.
*cracks up*
I love stuff like this.
This is really cool, Brad... I'm liking it.
I like it, I love, I cannot wait to read more of it. Once again james cusses the sky blue, but it has an actule chartming qulity for him. Also, sunshine keeps her part, being a bitch. Also i like twists this story is taking. You sure like the suspence effect. This commment is not as long as the last on, but i think you get my point. Nice job, and i hopeyou contionue to be just as creative( cannot think of a better word).
Ha, I've finally finished reading this episode
Sunshine is awesome again; she and Lena are so amusing. I agree with Rieda that James seems oddly familiar o.0 Maybe he's just one of those ... people. Or characters. Or whatever XD
Now for episode 3!
Both Sunshine and Lena are awesome. My favorite part was when Lena was like are you eating lube? I couldn't stop laughing. She's a very interesting character, afraid to say I was very interested to find that she had a boyfriend but not surprised after I saw what kind of guy he was.
James is awesome to, for for some reason he seems really familiar and I feel like I know him...which is impossible, but you know, it happens.
Onto the next yet again!
When these are over, be ready for me to beg you, yes?
~Rieda
Intentional?
XD Awesome. Love the intro. I had my face stuffed in a pillow so I wouldn't wake everybody up. Great job. Sunshine and John make a fantastic foil. They work so well together... lol.
lol, brilliant, Brad.
Yes, i have read this one.
Now, I want another one.
Like, now. I've been patient.
(see? You're reduced me to pointless reviews, though I know I had something I wanted to say about this initially...)
Anyway. Next one I won't have such a pointless review I almost want to, like, warn myself to not post such pointlessness.
Also: sunshine is awesome. again.
Haha, printers are worth more than people any day!
Just a little side note on lube and eating it by itself: there was this time where a bunch of friends opened a thing of lube (sampler size? I don't know...) and it was some sort of fruit flavor, like passionberry punch or something lame like that. Anyway, they were about to squirt it on their burrito, but then they chickened out and tasted it. It tasted, according to them, like chapstick. So there you go! They quickly decided to blow up some condoms (pun not intended) and then to pour lube all over it and throw around the condom like a balloon toss... but that's for another story.
Post part three soon, OR DIE.
hmm.. Another excellent episode. I hate you for leaving it hanging like that, but I suppose that's a good thing. Means you've held my interest. Even more so than with the first episode, I would say, and if you can hold my interest with script it will probably be even better seeing it played out. Looking forward to the next episode. ^^ Maybe we'll see Ann a li'l more in the next one? Would like to get to know her character some.. rather than these brief little glimpses
~Rea