It is one of those days,
where you feel like,
curling up,
around someone.
and , just, feeling,
their warmth.
It is one of those days,
where you feel like taking a walk
and breathing in,
the chilly air.
It is one of those days,
where you feel like,
writing whatever
comes into your head.
It is one of those days,
when sheets of paper,
are scattered across your bed,
each telling a different story.
It is one of those days,
where you feel calm
and content,
with life around you.
It is one of those days,
where you feel asleep and awake,
both at the same time.
It is one of those days,
where everything
works out
perfectly.
It is one of those days.
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hellooo draax!
I'm not really good at reviewing but I'm going to try anyway..be warned though XD
At first I want to say that I really love this poem..And yup those days are awesome!! And you have captured that feeling very well =)
There's just one little thing that I want to say:
My favorite part in this:
Great write!! I really enjoyed reading this..
-qaralynn-
I like it in the way that it describes a very relatable feeling. However, I don't like the unnecessary punctuation and changing the lines more than necessary. Other than that I completely understand exactly how you felt and you said it in a very clear very nice way!
I liked this. I agree with Amelia, though, you could use a different phrase as your theme. "One of those days..." I expected a depressing thing full of problems and events gone wrong. I was a little confused. That expectation actually stayed with me until close to the end, I just stared at it being confused saying, "Wait. Calm and content? On one of those days?" Just saying.
Hi! I really enjoyed your poem. I like the concept of the poem, although I tend to use the expression 'one of those days' when something bad's happened - for example - I've had one today - let's just say I had a disaster with a cake! lol. It is a little disjointed in some places; in others you use the wrong punctuation and your line arrangement isn't great in parts.
Here's a nitpick!
All in all, a great poem. Keep up the good work,
~ Amelia