I still love coming and reading this!!!!!!1
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Love:
It's the way I dream about you every night
It's the way I know I can't live without you.
It's the feeling I get when you message me back
It's the butterflies that flutter when you "heart" me
It's the day I'll never forget,
when you told me that you liked me back
when you said you wanted to be mine, and wanted me to be yours
when you whisper in my ear the words forever.
when I see your name appear as online.
when you didn't have to tell me for me to know you love me.
The first time you told me you love me,
I felt like a breath of fresh air.
I could finnaly breathe in and know
that it came from your heart
I love you...
Hello Gigi!
Is that okay if i shorten your name that way??
Soooo... I love it!
The lyrics flow well, and the verses are well put in as well.
I don't see any spelling errors or anything like that.
there's is feeling in it witch is good. The words really bring out the message of it.
Its actually very romantic, its a wonderful piece.
I hope to read more from you!
Sincerely Anma
Hey Nicole! I don't know anything about poetry so forgive me if I say something out of ignorance...
I only noticed two things that were a little off. The verse "when you didn't have to tell me for me to know you love me," the message is good so don't change that. I just had a hard time reading it. It didn't flow like the rest of it did so maybe find a way to reword it. On the verse just below that one, "when you whisper in my ear the words forever," should it be word instead of "words" since you only said forever?
Other than those things, I really liked it! One thing that I've never liked about poetry is that the message is always hidden and you're never sure what exactly the author was trying to get at. This one is very clear and I think it is one that everyone can relate to in their own way. The first four verses were my favorite. Those are the ones that struck out to me and the ones that I can relate to. Well done!
TWO WORDS!!
AWE STRUCK.
That is all that I am right now.
Speechless.
I dont know what to say other than THIS IS AMAZING!! I LOVE IT!!!
I am literally smiling so much right now.
I do not see anything that you would not like about this, I love it. It is the sweetest thing anyone has ever written for me!!!!!
AWWWWEEEEEILOVEIT and you !!!!
~Sorry for my weirdness.
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