“Wake up. We fell asleep yesterday. We have to go home” Alice muttered, softly kicking Cian in the side. She had barely woken up herself. He black hair was in knots, her eyes were crusted over, and she had what seemed like a perpetual scowl. “Wake up.” she kicked him again. He let out a set of soft murmurs and loud grumbles. “I’m not doin’ this for the good of my health. Get up or I’m going back to the village without you.”
“Fine. Okay. Just give me a second to get ready.” he was lying on his stomach, and stretched his arms wide.
“Get ready?” Alice was amused. “I’m sorry. Do you have someone to look good for? A hair bump for your mother? Maybe some aesthetically pleasing stubble when you confront the priest and tell him that there’s no heaven?” His head shot up, and he looked at Alice through the corner of his eye.
“Damn.” he murmured.
“What?”
“I thought that was a dream.”
Alice had to give Cian a few minutes to prepare himself. The clubhouse had been built by tying pieces of wood together with string. Cian took some of it, and tied his clothes- which had been ripped in the accident- back together. Alice used the time to brush the knots out of her hair with her fingers.
To help wake himself up, Cian went to the water, which was just a small lake when the tide went out, and splashed water in his face. As a joke, he brought some over in cupped hands and threw it in Alice’s face. She was angry, but ultimately appreciated it. So much had happened recently, which made her appreciate the, albeit mean, joke.
They walked to the forest’s entrance. Cian had seen the sight before, but this was Alice’s first glimpse of morning on the island. With the pastel blue backdrop, the sun was like a dangling earring, hanging from a giant’s ear, who was sleeping high above in space. The clouds were little rabbits that hopped carelessly through the sky, and you just wanted to rest your head on them. Little flakes of orange spotted the sky, like flakes of fire, and, occasionally, the wind would blow the tips of branches under them, and the tips looked like they were glowing, but only for a moment. The sight took her breath away, but the lazy winds made sure it wasn't absent long.
“What if another one of those things shows up?” Cian mumbled. They both looked back to the, still impaled, beast.
“Lice.” Alice said under her breath.
“What?”
“I’ve decided to call them lice. It kinda looks like a woodlouse, and the plural of woodlouse is woodlice, so i’m calling them lice.”
“Yeah. What if some lice show up?”
“Run?” she offered.
“Run.”
They walked the path slowly. Neither of them had eaten in some time, and their energy levels were low. Occasionally, they stumbled over some large rocks, or fallen branches. They both noticed how beat-up the trees looked- branches were sticking out like broken limbs. Something big had gone through here.
The notice board looked the same. It was plastered left and right with various advertisements, announcements, and notices.
“Okay. Which way do you want to go?” Cian asked Alice as she skimmed the board, looking for some useful information.
“I want to check on Granddad. Make sure he’s okay.”
“I need to go home. Check on my family and change my clothes.”
“Well i’ll just go my way, and you can go yours. We don’t need to be together constantly, Cian.”
“Yeah, but there's safety in numbers so..” he paused for a second.
“If you want to come with me, you just have to ask, idiot.” she smiled to take the sting out of her words.
Cian was waiting in the kitchen. He sat at the table, sipping tea. Above him, he could hear stomping footsteps- Alice’s heavy feet. She was not the most graceful of people. Looking around, he was amazed at the kitchen. At home, they had nothing more than basic equipment and a stove. This kitchen was bursting at the seams. An assortment of cabinets, most too full to close, hung on the wall. The counter at the center of the room was overflowing with different food, pots, pans, and utensils. It amazed him.
Cian looked down into his mug, and stared at his silhouette. It wasn't until his features were gone that he could see how truly scrawny he was.At the edge of his mug, he could see someone else. Long hair melted into thin shoulders. He turned around to greet and question Alice, but when he did he found he was alone.
He examined the room again, under fearful eyes. The cabinets, left agar, now held more uncertainty than curiosity. In the corner of his eye, he could see shapes reflected, that moved out of his vision, like they knew. They moved like a shy dancer, leaping out of sight, but giving glimpses of the beauty of their art. The once natural and comforting green that plastered the walls turned sickly, and threatened to close around and entomb him. He needed air.
“I’m getting some, air. I’ll be around back.” Cian shouted into the house, hoping they’d reach his friend. He walked past the table, to a small door that lead to a back garden.
It had the usual scenery- mountainous trees; luscious, dancing grace- all left so carelessly under a bright blue dome.
He had barely left the house when he heard his name. He turned around to find Lucy standing right behind him. She had long, white hair that fell in dull stings past her shoulders and to her waist. Her eyes were wide, and mostly pupil. Her face was expressionless. Cian was thinking over her, how he’d mistaken her for a boy when he was in his world, then her words came back like lightning. Nothing exists here. Maybe she was serious.. Maybe he’d thought of her as a boy, simply because things beyond himself hadn't existed there.
“Why are you here? I thought you couldn't leave the other world.”
“I am real because you know I am real.” she said. The muscles of her face tightened, like she was trying to express something, but wouldn't allow herself.
“So how are..” he began, but was cut off by a soft voice that, somehow, also conveyed authority.
“Listen. She won’t hurt you, but protect your friend. She is important. There is time.” and with that she was gone.
A moment later, Alice appeared where Lucy once stood. “He’s not here.” she sighed. “But, it doesn’t look like he left in a hurry, or anything, And all his stuff is here, so I doubt he went very far.”
“So, the village now?” he said, forgetting her.
“Yeah.” she pushed him out of the doorway. “We’ll go around the side, it’ll be easier.” Cian could hear laughter ringing in his ears. At first, he thought of Lucy, but no. This laugh was of a higher pitch, and coming from the house.
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Thewriter13 here for a review on this lovely Review Day! So I haven't read the rest of the chapters but I will once I am done reviewing this. I am quite intrigued by the plot so far and I think you did a wonderful job describing the relationship between Alice and Cian and the other characters.
won't get as distracted. But it's still a wonderful chapter nonetheless.
You have quite a bit to fix up here. In a lot of your sentence after you type up dialogue, you start of the next sentence with out capitalization. I know it shouldn't bother me but I got distracted from the story seeing all those nitpicks.
Here are just a few of them:
"“Wake up.” she kicked him again."
"“Fine. Okay. Just give me a second to get ready.” he was lying on his stomach, and stretched his arms wide."
"“Yeah, but there's safety in numbers so..” he paused for a second.
“If you want to come with me, you just have to ask, idiot.” she smiled to take the sting out of her words.
“Run?” she offered. "
There's just SO many and if you could fix those up, that would be nice. Frankly punctuation is key to a good story as well. Possibly because the correct punctuation and capitalization helps the story flow more because OCD people such as myself
Also there are some missing commas,
"“Wake up. We fell asleep yesterday. We have to go home” Alice muttered, softly kicking Cian in the side." Comma needs to go after "home" and before the quotation marks. Also how does one softly kick someone? Perhaps "gently kicking him" or "nudging him with force" or I don't know; it's only a suggestion I'm not saying you should change it. But I was just trying think of something that could possibly work there better.
"They walked to the forest’s entrance. Cian had seen the sight before, but this was Alice’s first glimpse of morning on the island.
With the pastel blue backdrop, the sun was like a dangling earring, hanging from a giant’s ear, who was sleeping high above in space. The clouds were little rabbits that hopped carelessly through the sky, and you just wanted to rest your head on them. Little flakes of orange spotted the sky, like flakes of fire, and, occasionally, the wind would blow the tips of branches under them, and the tips looked like they were glowing, but only for a moment. The sight took her breath away, but the lazy winds made sure it wasn't absent long."
Okay there's a bit you could fix in just this paragraph. I mean the imagery is WONDERFUL but some of it could be changed. Stuff in bold is what I think you could change. The first in bold is a bit redundant as "sight" and seen are in the same sentence. "Cian had seen the entrance before" is better worded, I think. Second bold is a run-on with a lot of commas, so perhaps try and use a semi colon or reword the sentence. Third bold is VERY run-on so either break up the sentences or use a semi colon. But the imagery in the sentence....BEAUTIFUL.
So I think this is very well done. I'm off to read more!
Please know I love this and I hope I didn't sound harsh or anything
Keep writing!
Hey there HightTop!
Another brilliant chapter! I am pretty sure I have said this in basically every previous review, but I cannot stress how awesome your description is! How you described the kitchen and also the sun coming up in the morning, which is something Cian had always seen but was a first for Alice. I love the images you create with your words, and it really is a talent. Imagery is always something difficult to bring across 
I am going easier on you this time, because there were some places with more, but I've taken out some of them, and will mention if you need to scan through the chapter to see more mistakes similar to the example given. Oh and, I am sure you can pull out most of what I left out if you read over it once with a close eye. Maybe print it out as well? I know that helps me
Ooh look I am faster this time, yay
I think it's really realistic that you kept Cian and Alice together. After all the weird things that have been happening to them lately, I am not surprised that he wants to stick together. I really see Alice's character unraveling... she's the tough and brave person, willing to go on her own, but also willing to accept other people as well. A real independent and down to earth person. Hannah seems more like the mother of the group. As for Poppy and Cian, we have to see a bit more of them for their character to develop some more and for them to really be brought to life as well. I am looking forwards to seeing it happen.
Although your descriptions are awesome in general, there were some minor things that had me confused about this chapter. Some things I felt like we really need to have clarified. The first I was curious about was, how is Cian seeing all these silhouettes in a mug alone? I think maybe you should mention him looking at the shadows on the wall or something? To me that makes more sense, and might be easier to picture. It was kind of hard for me to imagine him seeing this all in a mug alone :/
Also, when they are leaving the house at the end and they are hearing that laughter, is it coming from Alice's house that she was just in? Make sure you mention that, because I didn't know if it was that one or just another on the street. Something along the lines of 'This laugh was of a higher pitch, and coming from the house they'd only just left.'
Nitpick time
This is something I've noticed in previous chapters as well, although it's only happened once here. Just make sure you have that vital punctuation mark at the end of the dialogue as well, before the closing speech marks.
Minor thing, but I think you mean his.
I just think this looks a bit weird with the commas, but I am not completely sure how to change it? I suggest: So much has happened recently, which made her appreciate the joke, albeit it mean. Maybe there is another way to put it as well, but it's really up to you ^.^
I think you could have this sentence change the 'to' to a 'at' and remove all the commas. Or you could just switch the word order around a bit and have it like: They both looked back at the beast, still impaled by the tree [is this what is was impaled with? I have forgotten since the last chapter].
Typo! This needs to be capitalized. It also happens somewhere else, down the way of the chapter. So if you look through I am sure you will find it too
The question here is, what do you mean by they'd? I think it might be better if you say 'hoping his friend would hear.'
That's all for nitpicks. I am looking forwards to seeing the contrast of Cian's house as you already said they were so different, and what Alice might think about it as well. And if there is anyone at Cian's house too
Otherwise, you've got everything else working well here! Pacing, plot, style, setting... just keep up the great writing
Deanie x