Dream-“A series of images, events and feeling that happen in your mind while you’re asleep” definition by Oxford Advanced Learner’s Dictionary- 7th edition.
Ha! That’s what you call a dream?
Well Hi, I’m Marple. You can call me Miss Marple. For the last few days, I’m thinking endlessly about dreams,so i was just wondering if I can write something about it.
“Oh! I’m a model of
A fairness cream!
Oh, no! It was just a dream!”
Um, sorry, this song I've accidentally remembered. Enough of *Out-of-issue* lectures, now let’s put the thing.
D-R-E-A-M→ cool thing, obviously. How amazing they are ! Naturally, dreams we get when we’re sleeping but some of us get those when we’re awake, that is too- naturally. As we read various sort of stories, our dreams are stories as well. We think, dreaming is so easy, no?
ACTUALLY NO! Dreaming is not easy. I’m not talking about dreams we get while sleeping instead I’m talking about “I HAVE A DREAM” kind of dream. To have dream for life is not everyone’s cup of tea. What, giving those rebuke-looks to me? Oh please!
I have a friend. She’s okay overall but one thing is, she does not dream! I mean, those “Real-time” or “Day-dream” whatever you call that. Not this that, she’s so confident of achieving everything she wants. The fact is, she thinks dreaming of something will take that thing away from her. In brief, she’s scared.
Scared of dreaming, lady? I can understand the scare of spider, cockroach or any bugs but dreams?
Yeah, there are sayings that,
“Only the losers dream. That’s not what winners do.”
I say, if you don’t dream of something, what on earth will make you want that? Dreams are related to achievement. Here’s a flow chart showing you how:
Dream→ Get Motivated→ Working hard→ Harder→ Failing→ Standing up again→ Thinking of giving up→ Remembering the dream→ Again UP→ Success.
See? Dreams not a loser’s business. This is what a winner should have. I say, dream a lot! I’m not sure but I fancy it’s good for health too.
It does not mean we all should dream to get the Nobel Prize or something (though, I don’t see any wrong on that.)
Look, me an old, faint woman, I too dream a lot, even used to. Of being Pilot, Scientist, Writer, Astronaut.. the list goes on. Dreaming does not require paying. And not necessarily all our dreams will come true. But, along with that, I ask you, dreaming won’t make you small, will it? Since all my dreams did not come true, now I’m a writer, I write what gives me pleasure. No matter people criticize them; I’m just in fun with myself.
You know, all you young fellas should dream. It never matters how peculiar they are. It’s honestly not a *Failure-do* as I stated before.
Parents might think I’m ruining their kids by saying all these. My mom told me once,
“Never dream! Go straight for action!”
I know that has got spirit into it but unfortunately and unnecessarily I dreamt!
However, I know that you need to work hard to be special. You have to take actions at certain situations. Life can’t be passed by only dreaming big. But like the engine needs petrol, in your life, you need to dream. Tell me, if we never had dream about flying, would there be jets today?
So, all I’m saying, DON’T DREAM.
Ah! Aaaghh! This typing errors! Sorry, that was about to be this-
Dream a lot. Dream big. Dream anything.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,020 Literary Works • 672,734 Reviews
A quick review.
I see, you haven't written anything since 4 months and reviewers here are critically commenting about your grammar. I won't say this essay is extra ordinary, but I'd honestly say, you have your own unique style. Grammar is not the only thing. First comes the urge, the desire to say something, to tell something new and then follows the language.
Yes, your essay does have some grammar issues, but you can go back to it anytime and correct it. My concern is, this "felt been there seen there" article. Try to present the same theme uniquely. Grammar shall follow. Come up with some bizarre ideas. For example: An essay on dream through the point of view of 'sleep'
Imagine, What if 'Sleep' itself talks about dreams? It says, "I have seen leaders like Abraham Lincoln, Boxers like Muhammad Ali, part themselves from me because they were chasing something called 'dream'" An essay where sleep tries to understand why only few people have these big dreams.
While writing something as bizarre as this, you get immense joy, yet you convey the same message in a never seen before format. Yes grammar is important, but the priority should be to do something new. Uniqueness is what readers are looking for.
I like your style. All you need is freshness. Keep writing. Dont delve into editing so deep that you lose creativity. A manual of "How to use windows 8" has perfect grammar, but none of your creativity. I hope you get it! Cheers
I expected a reply D:
I'm awfully sorry.. Only today i came here after probably a week.. but, i've seen your review earlier, just wanted to read it again and give a reply without any grammar issues. S.G.C. is really driving me crazy..
thank you for your kind words. when i got that, i went like, "How come this user is not being rude?" Actually lately, i have been very much unable to write something good or sth which totally makes sense.. Like, i can't think properly or can't give proper words to my thoughts. duh, anyway, enough of that.. i'm never so serious, so, why now?
Thanks, very very. and, sorry again.
Hello there, here as promised.
So an article you say, but it felt more like a dialogue of an annoying character from a script. I very much understood the idea you tried to convey(from the title, of course), but the way you have laid it down to us, readers, is not very attractive. The first thing that came to my mind was, "Who is this lady? And why is she asking me to dream?" You did not give a strong introduction to your character and not enough information on why she thinks dreaming is good. First of all, this didn't feel like an article as I mentioned before. It felt very preachy and become very difficult to keep reading it because of the grammatical errors. Now everyone, when we begin writing, will have grammar problems. We just need to learn more and keep practicing it. Grammar plays a vital role in getting readers to read your works. I see that your very first problem is grammar, so concentrate on that. That's pretty much all I have to say.
You just keep writing and learning. We all started somewhere.
Cheers!
Thanks and i replied to a comment (very similar to yours) so, you can read that if you want. That's my reply to your review as well.
And here's a note, in that comment, I wrote "along" instead of writing "a long." And if I've made A LOT OF GRAMMATICAL ERRORS (AGAIN!) I guess you guys have enough big heart to have mercy on me. Thank you.
Okay... So I am here to review this article. The starting of the essay was smart, because you used a definition to clear doubts. But from then on, the essay goes on a downward spiral. First off, I'd like to suggest some serious grammar courses for you. The article is disconnected and a series of uninteresting sentences and its casual nature fail to enamor. Your punctuation is faulty and the sentences are not complete. Also, due to lack of good vocabulary, the passage becomes dull and boring. The essay is not to the point or concise and instead goes on for a long time. Sorry to say, but I found this piece of literature slightly unnerving in the sense of its distasteful thought and writing effort. The article goes on and on about dreams and how one should dream but doesn't determine a way to make those dreams come true. If dreaming is good, then why don't achievers keep dreaming? Right? There has to be an introduction, body, conclusion, correction and solution with a catchy slogan for an article to be interesting and engaging. Unfortunately the essay covers none of those and instead goes about trying to interest readers into a mess of thoughts.
Sorry for being such a harsh critic. I know I can be tough. I'd like to see more of your work and also help out if needed.
Check out my poem 'Just a Spark'. Read, comment, review, like, and follow please!!!
HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!
~ SilverKnight007
I don't know whether I should thank you for your review because it almost made me cry. You could have been a little bit good. I have written this one after along break, probably of 4 months. As I guess I had writer's block. I know, I need to increase my vocabulary but, I'm not sure about "Serious grammar courses." I was simply happy that I got rid of my block, so without checking it much, I posted it. Now, I think, I've made a huge mistake. Because after seeing reviews, I'm feeling like I should never write again... However, thank you. But, if you ever read any article like mine ( faulty) please be more nice to them. Thanks.
I am so sorry @AnaMin if that's how you felt due to my harsh criticism. I'll take down my review if you would like that. I really didn't mean to hurt anybody's feelings. Sorry!
~ Silver
No need to do that. It was a new experience for me.
Hey! I am sorry again!! But your spirit of perseverance is commendable!
Hope to see more of your work. Please do check out my work!
Well a nice post on dreams. I like dreams that we see while we are awake. And fulfilling such dreams is an exciting act. However, the post is good and inspiring. Liked the way you started the essay with oxford's definition of dreams.
Thank you szaib.