Published September 15, 2006
In Old Poetry
*head/desk*
This was insanely amusing, Brad. Somewhat sick, but then that's you. I'm not sure I can take it seriously enough to actually critique it, although I will say that "Way Number 25" had a different rhyme scheme, which somewhat threw me off, even though it still goes with the whimsical feel of the piece...
Yeah okay, I need to go before I actually STUDY this. Hilarious, Brad. Jeez.
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Yeah, so basically you're sort of hysterical.
Slashing good language. My only issue is the different rythming scheme on 25. On the other hand though, it's effective in the way it regains your attention before immediately launching back into the original ryhming sequence...Almost like a sudden outburst in the middle of a typical conversation. Nice work.
*gigglesnort*
And that's all I have to say.