Gah, small font. Anyway..
That's a nice poem. I like it. There's one line.. "wishing we were someone" that doesn't flow to me.. You go from plural to singular.. Kinda strange. But then again, not much makes sense to me right now.
Anyway, keep up the great work!
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I loved the last line. '...sometimes'
ha ha. Cool
No comment. Though i did post something. Like you said.
aghhh! my eyes!!!,lol.
i liked this poem. don't ask me why, but it reminded me of "the red" by chevelle which is one of my favorite songs/videos.