Hi there @ChristenedPages I am here to do a reveiw so first things first.
what I like
Finch sailed away on the Moon Gem. okay that is a stranch name for a ship I like it that ekslpans things a bit better form the other one.
What needs work
Come hither readers, okay so I have not herd a word that is hither so I do not no what that meens.
of bravery, mischief, and seekers that begins with setting sail. this is eksplaning the other one that I just read. but first give us an image of what the place looks like around the sail, and the place that there in whats it called.
he had a thirst for riches he couldn't quench. okay why why would he have a thest for riches in other words money was he pore, then again I do not no what quench means this is the first time I am reading it.
raised by trial and error. so was he raised by someone else our did he just have bad parents I am really confessed right now.
The villagers, despite their lifelong overseeing, okay do they stay out on the sea all the time like is that were they life on the ship.
was powerless when reading the hasty IOU Finch wrote. why dose Finch right this stove it is a bit of a weird tail I must say.
and soon after Finch gorged on his rations, I have not herd the word gorged before as well.
He laughed, and offered it his dried beef. I don't think raccoons eat beef there vegetarians.
"I'll become twice the man they could ever make me." he convinced the sky, and himself. what dose he mean by this, also we still do not no what poeple look like what did the raccoon look like.so that is all that I can say, so keep the good work. HAPPY REVIEW DAY.
@EagleFly out to seek and kill
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