Young Writers Society

Heyo! I'm here to review!! I really felt the passion and feelings you put into this poem, and I really like the moral of it. It's a bit of a sad poem, but the sad ones are often the best. I can see that you really write from your heart which is a really good characteristic to have in your writing, so yet again, you have a written an awesome poem! I'm glad that you put a somewhat happy ending, to show that there's always hope. I'm pretty sure I enjoyed this poem too much, if that's even possible! Never stop writing poems cause you are amazing at it, hope to see more of your works soon. Keep writing!

Hello Chinku!

Well well, this is one interesting poem. How the speaker finds comfort in the sea--and somehow it changes and the speaker cannot dive there anymore, but still loves it. It's a bit sad I don't know, maybe it reminds me just a teeny bit of how people outgrow their old comforts. Like the blankie or stuffed animal they loved as a toddler. Another meaning I can draw from what I assume is this metaphor is like a lover the speaker confides in. Eventually, the lover and speaker drift apart and the speaker, even now, continues to wish that the speaker could confide in the lover again. I like it a lot, because it makes me think!

What will I describe?

Meaning of the dark deep blue sea;

The peace or tranquility;

The beauty or the color?

But somehow, some strange faces

Some racy and unusual waves,

Nice, really great poem, a deep meaning without the need for complex wording and structure. I love how you describe the hope for truly living once again. However, i do have some advice on the first few lines. Usually as just a rule of thumb, you should try to keep descriptions singular in one line, as listing threatens to decrease flowability. I usually try, if i have more than one description i am identifying, I add a line underneath, as to put multiple words together while still grasping the same ideas. Ill just give an example of what i might change it to, "Meaning of the dark blue sea, the peace or tranquility, whose dephs have no end" (just doing this for example) All in all however, this was an amazing poem, and very relatable. I hope to hear more from you later, good job! :3

As the deep blue sea is, This poem too has some deep meanings and feeling. It is an awesome work.