Today, I ponder the days of my innocence;
When “come” meant “come”, not “cum” in sense,
And “pussy” was nothing but my pet cat.
Those days when red, orange, yellow, green, indigo, and blue
were simply colors of the rainbow,
And cucumbers were meant to be eaten.
Oh, days when love was feelings’ sweet, not what you give;
And Friendships bore no grudges, just good play,
When family’s sole demand was homework done
And Jerry’s antics relatable, with a collective disdain for Tom.
As I reflect, my innocence endures,
A gift called youth and its exuberance.
And in my grand age’s embrace, I’ll reminisce,
Smiling at the twisted mind of my youthful bliss.
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This is really gorgeous, I've read some of your other work and I think your a great poet
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I actually quite enjoyed this poem, and I love the title; it perfectly encapsulates the level of twisted mayhem required to change the meaning of fairly ordinary words into darker/more lewd meanings. My favourite line, personally, was:
"And Friendships bore no grudges, just good play"
Primarily because this is extremely relatable for me- I feel like friendship issues and fakeness is getting more common, to the point where it appears some have gotten the purpose(s) of it to begin with.
Keep writing!
I'm usually not a big poetry guy but this was funny and easily relatable. Different words and symbols have taken on different meanings as we've experienced/learned more and culture has shifted. These changes have coincided with the arrival of different responsibilities that come with growing older, as well as more complicated social experiences. Thinking back on my childhood, before I had to think about all this other stuff, makes me realize how different a person I am now, and yet it is true that there is still a lot that is the same. The innocence endures.
Thank You so much for this review! I'm glad it's totally relatable and everyone almost feels the same way. In the end, no matter how old we grow, we will forever be kids at heart despite the the realities of adulthood.
Thank You so much for this review! I'm glad it's totally relatable and everyone almost feels the same way. In the end, no matter how old we grow, we will forever be kids at heart despite the the realities of adulthood.
hey there! this is loveissourgrapes, and I am here to review your poem. this poem should be 18+ or 16+ because of some words the very young writers not might understand and are not safe for work. also, I might have a lot of errors because I am typing on my phone.
the meaning of this poem is good. i guess it is my lucky day where I get to read poems with great meanings. I do reflect on those things too. where days were brighter than now. when I was nine years old, somebody asked me, "What do children have but adults don't?" and I told them innocence and freedom. they see, hear, or feel things that feel way different from their childhood days. some people miss it, some people reflect, and some people just say, "Oh yeah, great old days."
by the way, with your problem, that happened to me too. I don't know why, too. I asked a mod why is this happening, but they told me to post a post concerning it in a form, but I could not find the link for it. you could ask a mod too what is happening.
I hope this review helps you with your problem in yws and some compliments for your masterpiece. over all, it's great to just make the rating higher. have a great day/night even if it would not be as great life before as a young innocent being <33
Thank You for bringing the age limitations to my notice. I'm glad you loved the poem!
Hi, for anyone wanting to review, this is originally a three stanza poem but for some weird reason YWS didnt let me space it out no no matter how many times i tried.
Thank you and a happy Review!
Hi, for anyone wanting to review, this is originally a three stanza poem but for some weird reason YWS didnt let me space it out no no matter how many times i tried.
Thank you and a happy Review!