My heart is aching,
crying out for something,
something that isn't there,
and may never be again.
Oh my love, my love.
Beautiful memories haunt me,
reminding me of our laughs and fights,
fights that I will never forget,
because they always ended in a kiss.
Oh my love, my love.
You are my addiction,
a deep and dark desire,
desire to have something,
that is forever forbidden.
Oh my love, my love.
I write you this letter,
yet you will never receive it,
it will never be opened,
and never be read.
Oh my love, my love.
You are in my dreams,
forever you will stay,
stay in my heart,
even if you aren't in my arms.
Oh my love, my love.
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Hey! I don't believe I have introduced myself before, I am SecreteJournalist... but feel free to call me Brie. I am reviewing for The Green Lanterns today! Happy review day to you(:
I am gonna review stanza by stanza.
My heart is aching,
crying out for something,
something that isn't there,
and may never be again.
Oh my love, my love.
I read this stanza, and instantly I knew I would love the whole poem. Absolutely amazing.
Beautiful memories haunt me,
reminding me of our laughs and fights,
fights that I will never forget,
because they always ended in a kiss.
Oh my love, my love.
Fights and a kiss. That's happened to me, it plays with my heartstrings xD But really, nice job!
You are my addiction,
a deep and dark desire,
desire to have something,
that is forever forbidden.
Oh my love, my love.
I love this one, its dark, forbidden, rule breaking, wonderful stanza.
I write you this letter,
yet you will never receive it,
it will never be opened,
and never be read.
Oh my love, my love.
Your an amazing writer, I find nothing wrong with this poem yet!
You are in my dreams,
forever you will stay,
stay in my heart,
even if you aren't in my arms.
Oh my love, my love.
Love it! I love your poetry already, I will definitely have to read more. I find nothing wrong with this poem.. you are outstanding! Great job!
~Sincerely
SecreteJournalist
AKA
Brie
The let me use a computer every once in a while.
I recieved it lol
Hits home. Love lasts longer than the relationship it's self. Sad but sometimes true. Great job, and it is possible to love more than one person.
if you truly love someone you'll never stop, someone else will just come along who you'll love more. 
there's a lesson in everything. Beautifully crafted. I have nothing bad to say! 
Hi! Okay so I like the repetition of "Oh my love, my love." Love stories are some of my favorite poetry subjects. I felt like there was a disconnect though because it seemed a little impersonal. If you introduce memories, you should go in to depth more on those memories. Details are very important when connecting with an audience. Readers are looking for visual imagery and some way they can connect to your piece. If you want the readers to really feel, tell the story of a particular love story, not just love stories in general. That's just my advice, Other than that, I like the letter stanza.