Young Writers Society

Hiya Beast! hannah0528 here for a quick review. I hope it is helpful!
Haha, wow this was hilarious! Recently my teacher has been kicking people who have there video off out of the meeting so it really sucks cause...yeah.

"Oh, oatmeal and prunes, why hast thou led me astray?"

Oh gosh this cracked me up.

"Oh gallon of water, why hast thou undermined my authority?"

A gallon of water? oof. That sounds horrible XDDD. This was hilarious.

I also thought that the formatting was well done! I want to write reviews that help the author but I really can't think of anything wrong with this. Maybe simplify the language a little bit?


I hope this review was helpful! Definitely giving this a like. Keep writing and have a great day!

Oh my gosh, this is hilarious. It's so true, too. I can't highlight any specific lines because it's all good. I love the Shakespearean words, it makes it that much funnier. One thing: did you want to put punctuation at the end of "Go and be free" or is it connected to the next line?
That is all. Thank you for writing this.
--Book_Dragon

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OMG THIS IS THE MOST RELATABLE FEELING EVER!! Great job Beast!

Ahahaha I love this so much XDDDDDD

Hi Beast!
I can really relate to this funny poem. Many times this year I've had to choose between the bathroom or my google meet for school. I've been torn between leaving my computer idle and the possibility of missing something important. It's not a good situation to be in XD

Oh, oatmeal and prunes, why hast thou led me astray?

Oh gallon of water, why hast thou undermined my authority?

Hello, Beast!

Valkyria here with a review!

This was a really funny poem, and I was laughing after every line. Which wasn't good because I'm supposed to be doing work in class.

I related to this poem. One time, I was in Math class, and the teacher was explaining a difficult topic, but I really had to go to the bathroom. So I was even more confused when I came back.

I love the stylistic choices you made at the end of the stanzas, such as the lines sloping down.

I only have a couple of suggestions.

Some of the other lines have punctuation, like the period at the end "I cannot hold thee back anymore." I feel like you can put a question mark at the end of these lines:

Oh oatmeal and prunes, why hast thou led me astray

Oh gallon of water, why hast thou undermined my authority

go and be free