Blood dripping down the wall. good opening, well worded because it's lower in word count than what it could be. You could be more efficient though.
Splattered there by who knows what,
or who. Put this farther out because it'll read faster and hit harder.
Bodies burned in shafts and the maniacal laughter of who? Drop of who, it'll be better.
Ah, love.
Ah, life. Love these lines. Awesome.
Blood dripping down the wall.
Like the bloody trail of the west. So good, try another word than west but keep the idea.
Blood! BLOOD
I can’t say I regret it.
Bodies found in sewers, ditches.
Decomposed, the smell of rotting flesh.
This is not a confession.
Rats gnawing, flies digesting. Good poetry here.
What do you mean?
This is not a confession.
Bloodstains my hand, but it’s my own.
I love her, she is a part of me.
Gnawing, gnawing, blood-stained fur.
Blood dripping down the wall. What? Too rushed.
So, before reading this I thought i was going to be a little worried but now I am not.
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