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Chapter Five
Seb pushed his way back into the restaurant, stomach tightening by the second. He couldn’t tell if was the imminent transformation, or the fear of what would happen if the stranger was discovered.
The restaurant wasn’t warm and welcoming anymore - it was full of people that probably wouldn’t treat him kindly if they knew the truth. He slipped between people and waiters, dipping and dodging trays of food that suddenly smelt nauseating.
Seb checked under tables, half expecting Riley to emerge from the back of the restaurant shouting and lecturing, too desperate to care about the confused looks and hostile glares he earned as he working his way clockwise around the room. He wondered while he searched, he wondered why he was looking for the stranger, a boy who hadn’t even told him his name nor shown anything close to gratitude.
I’m looking for him because he’ll be easy to find. He’d be a charcoal smudge on a canvas of colour - as soon as Seb laid eyes on him, he’d know instantly. It’d be easy. He hoped.
By the time Seb had searched all of the tables, he was trembling. It wouldn’t be long now. He could practically feel his fingernails narrowing into claws. He sprinted to the bathrooms, calling out and then realising he didn’t have anything to name the stranger. He checked the reception area, sprinted up to the family’s quarters, and then back down again to the door by the kitchen, panting like a dog and leaning against a wall until he’d caught his breath.
Seb sidled into the kitchen, slinking around the door and then checking everywhere he could before he was shooed out with obscene gestures and angry shouts. A waiter watched Seb leap out of the kitchen, followed by angry hollering, and made a grab at the scuff of his neck.
Nope. Years of dodging bullies’ punches kicked in as Seb stooped under the hand and pushed it out of the way, making a dash for the door that lay around the corner at the end of the stuffy corridor. He was shaking so hard that his hands couldn’t grip the damn door handle. He heard the waiter behind him, almost around the corner. Seb gave up on the doorknob and threw his trembling body through the swing-door on his right as quietly as he could, falling forwards onto the floor of some kind of storeroom.
It was cramped, like everything else in that building was, and full of vegetables and spices and strange powders, all lined up on metal racks that ran in rows up and down the cupboard-room. As he calmed down, he noticed another smell that made his nose wrinkle. It was unwashed human, and the unmistakable stench of musty wolf.
Shaking, just like Seb was, and crumpled under the food selves was the stranger. He stared up at Seb, who made a shhh motion with a quaking finger as he crouched down to the stranger’s level.
“C’mon,” he whispered, “we have to go. It’s not that bad,”
Nothing. No kind of movement. No recognition in those awful, livid eyes.
“You have to come. You can’t shift here. These people don’t know about our wolves!” He hissed.
Silence.
“Please. We’ll have to move away if you get caught. You need to come with me.”
Silence.
“You’re-” Seb’s voice died in his throat as a violent shudder ran up his spine. He fell onto all fours, jolting horribly against the floor and heaving like he was about to vomit. He shut his eyes. All he registered before he opened them again was pinpricks and pressure all over his skin, and a moment of near perfection as his senses of smell and hearing burst and intensified.
He opened his eyes gingerly and wriggled out of his suffocating clothes. Underneath the metal rack, the stranger had transformed, too. He lay curled up and still shivering as Seb picked up his clothes and glared.
The door swung open and light sprawled across the room. Seb scrambled under the shelf with the stranger, biting back barks of pain as the metal dug into his back and wincing at the sound of his claws scrabbling across the floor.
Footsteps came closer and patrolled up and down, peering into the corners. Seb pushed harder against the stranger, pressing them both up against the wall as the footsteps approached and searched over everything again.
It was the longest thirty seconds of Seb’s life. His heart galloped in his chest, his breathing stopped as he stared at the waiter’s feet. He could feel the stranger panicking in exactly the same way. If it hadn’t been so serious, it would’ve been laughable - his future depended on a pair of feet and which way they turned.
Eventually, they sighed and muttered something as they went. Seb waited another minute, until he’d heard the footsteps leave and fade into the mind-numbing beat of the club down the street. The noises of the kitchen and the restaurant returned to humming like a wasps' swarm on the brink of attack.
Seb clawed his way out of from under the shelf, ears pulled back in displeasure. The stranger followed, waving his tail faintly. Seb raised his lips to bare his teeth, flinching whenever he heard anyone go by outside. This isn’t the time to wag your bloody tail.
Seb sat back on his haunches and tucked his tail close to his body. His ears twitched every time someone walked by. The stranger settled down, laying his head on his scrawny paws and occasionally sneaking a glance at Seb.
It felt as if his mind were drowning in anger, lapping at his thoughts and rising like floodwater. Seb didn’t stifle the growl in his chest. It was the stranger’s fault, all his fault. That idiot wandered off for no reason, probably just to cause trouble and ruin Seb’s life. In that little room, that damnable storeroom with its dusty walls and its grimy windows, he could solve it all.
One well-placed bite, one little snap, and all of his problems would be solved. Seb stared at the stranger’s neck. A very dark part of him, one that hadn’t stirred in the years since his adoption, threatened to overthrow his conscience. Just one moment of violence, and he’d never have to feel this anger ever again.
The stranger whined, sitting up and turning the back of his neck away from Seb’s jaws. The whites of his eyes showed as his hackles came up. Seb let his snarl die, bringing his ears forward into a friendlier position.
He sighed and buried his morbid temptations. Shame and guilt welled up as he collected his clothes up in his mouth. The stranger copied and cocked his head as if he were waiting for some kind of instruction.
Seb scanned around the room, padding around the metal racks to stare up at the filthy window. Garish streetlight filtered in through the dirt. He reared up onto his hind legs, resting his giant paws on the windowsill and staring into the glass.
It didn’t look too thick; typical frosted glass that was covered in a layer of something greasy that Seb couldn’t name. He counted down from five in his head.
Seb smashed his skull against the window. Shards of glass flew and settled in his fur, glinting in the silver like a grey sequin-covered dress. Seb shook his pelt out and clambered up out of the window, slipping on a misplaced paw. The knives of glass still left in the windowpane dug into and pierced the soft parts of his underbelly. He scrabbled with his hind paws and tumbled over into the gutter in the street outside, yelping into the bundle of clothes in his mouth.
Scents of night in the city blew over him and ruffled his fur. Fumes and bins and the wind melted together into a delicious mess of smells. Through his dull eyes, the road was a mess of fuzzy red and golden lights that rumbled at the mouth of the alleyway.
The stranger followed, nimbly and swiftly, with all of the silent grace of a jaguar. He landed next to Seb, who was still picking himself up and complaining about his cuts. He picked up a soft creak and heavy footsteps, as door to the storeroom swung open and two men flooded inside.
Seb took off toward the main road, looping from the back of the building to the restaurant's front, splashing water and something unspeakable up his legs and into his fur as he went. Each stride felt as if it were ripping the wounds on his stomach wider and wider, dripping blood as he paused by the corner that led onto the pavement. The stranger stopped beside him, sniffing and peering down the pavement.
It was empty, apart from a car swinging out into the foggy darkness. A plane soared and banked overhead, whirring quietly. Seb looked at the stranger and nodded, taking off down the street. They loped past Chinese takeaways and kebab shops, shaking off the rain as they listened keenly, turning their ears to every noise.
They skidded to a halt outside the shabby Indian restaurant and Seb surged forwards to poke his head through the dog flap in the front door. He cringed backwards with a yelp as the dog - a big-boned German Shepherd named Cody hellbent on defending his territory - shoved his muzzle through the door and started barking. Behind Seb, the stranger barked back.
The doorknob grated against metal as it was turned, and Seb could hear a human trying to soothe Cody as his barks died into raspy growls. The front door opened, and Seb rushed backwards, into the shadows. The stranger followed suit, cowering beside Seb.
Cody was dragged indoors, while his handler muttered something about stupid kids as she shut the door. Seb glanced at the stranger, whose shoulders were haunched over - presumably - with fear and tail was tucked between his legs like a disgraced dog.
A car’s engine wheezed into life as it pulled out of its parking place. Its garish lights shone onto Seb and the stranger, blinding them. Pain flashed across Seb’s eyes and fear squeezed his chest as he flinched away, springing across the main road behind them. A van screeched past, blaring its horn as it almost ran them over.
Seb stopped at the railings that divided the pavement from the canal below, watching the road and the cars go by as he pushed against the metal like a cornered lab rat. His lips rippled away from his teeth in a petrified last line of defence for an attack that never came. Seb forced his breathing to go slower, trying to pick apart the scents in the rain and the fumes.
There was nothing but water, nighttime, and rubbish floating up from the canal. The stranger pressed up against Seb’s flanks, quivering, as a lorry rumbled past. For the first time, Seb didn’t shy away from the contact. Even though the bloody twat was responsible for everything - everything - that had happened, Seb found himself making a low, rumbling sound to try to reassure him.
Seb glanced back at the door to Tanvi’s restaurant. Safety was one thing Seb doubted they’d have that night. Riley is going to kill me. The rain started to fall harder. It was a perfect, torrential cloak for them to slink away under.
And so, checking over their shoulders with every other step, they did.
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Hi! Back after a short break from the story, so I hope I don't forget any important details. I read this through before, so now am rereading it to refresh my thoughts on it.
I love the tension of the set-up here. The need to stay hidden contrasted with the desire to find the stranger in time, and then having to work together. It's a situation full of conflict which makes it very exciting to read and find out what happens!
I LOVE Seb's dark moment. The thought of one snap to the neck and that would be it. It's also fun because their relatoinship can't sink much lower, so it'll be great to see them start to talk to each other in the future. (My only complaint is I find it a bit confusing when compared with the mention a few chapters ago about the adoptive instinct overpowering them and making them want to take care of the stranger)
I did get a little confused about the navigation. I thought they were in the same building as the rest of the family, then he goes out the window, through some alleys, and to the restaurant where the family is? Did they just circle around to the back and come back in the same building, or did I get really lost?
Actually, am I going mad, or did you edit this recently? I SWEAR it ended with them back at the rest of the family, and that was one of my major complaints (disappointed their misadventure was so short), but now it seems they ARE stuck outside and have to figure something out. Which is way more fun.
I'd say some of the blocking / descriptions / details could do with clarification, as I got muddled a few times in this chapter. For example, when the car engine wheezed to life, I didn't know where to picture it coming from, or another example is I wan't always clear where they were in relation to a road (in the road? across the road? in an alley?)
Otherwise this is a great chapter that really promises some excitement to come.
Yeaahhhh I edited it. I'm in the process of making the posted story way better while doing the same for the unposted, so ya got me there. It did end with Seb and stranger getting back, but I decided it was unrealistic - and boring - of them to get past a defensive German Shepherd and a restaurant/house full of people unnoticed.

Anyways, thank you for reviewing
-AnarchyWolf
Hey, I'm here to leave a review! I haven't read the previous chapters, so pardon me if I'm confused at parts that have been explained earlier on.
'people' are repeated twice. I suggest switching the second one with 'customers' as it would cease the redundancy and add more to what kinds of people are there.
'working his way' should be 'work his way'.
I wonder what's Seb looking for? Obviously he doesn't the stranger to be exposed, but what does that stranger has to do with him? And if the stranger does have something to do with him, why doesn't he know the stranger's name? It's clear Seb's desperate right now, and I'm curious as to why he needs to find this stranger (or perhaps Riley?) asap.
Lel, my question is addressed on the next sentence. xD Now that we know Seb has done something to the stranger (a boy) that deserves gratitude, I'm still wondering why does he need to find him? I mean, to the point of despair? Does the stranger has something for Seb? Hmm...
Uh-oh. He's transforming. At first, I thought he had done that, but now I knew better. He's looking for the stranger in a restaurant with many people, and he's transforming. I wouldn't say it's a good plan, but hey, maybe the stranger is worth more than people knowing he's a werewolf.
I can figure out this is the boy Seb's looking for... but 'stench of musty wolf'?! Is the boy a werewolf too? Reading on!
I would suggest to switch 'stranger' with 'boy'. Stranger is too odd a term for someone you want to rescue, and since we know it's a boy, it's better to be described that way, because it's more accurate than an abstract 'stranger'.
Lol.
I like it that Seb doesn't go with his morbid decision to kill the boy. It does seem rational to get rid one of your problem, even if it's alive, but to spare the boy's life (and saving it) is a proof of Seb's humanity and caring personality. Definitely the protagonist you want to root for. I like how you handle his character.
I like the scene between Seb and boy with Cody. It's an interesting fact (if you based this novel on real wolves) to know that wolves can be afraid of dog as long as said dog is big and fierce. Other than that, I think the flow of events in this chapter is done well, although some parts are a bit mundane than the others. I would also like to know who's Riley, because it seems like she's someone important for Seb (and perhaps other werewolves as well).
I hope the boy's character is developed further on, because he doesn't stand out to me, and I can't make out of him sufficiently. All in all, this is a solid chapter. Keep up the good job!
Thank you for reviewing
Elliot -- the stranger -- does get more character development later on, though I should probably start with it earlier. Riley is Seb's foster mother, who is also a werewolf.
-AnarchyWolf
Hey,
First for the boring stuff... Grammatical Etc. errors:
Cupboard-room should just be cupboard room no hyphen is needed.
A simple typo here, selves should be shelves.
The should be added in here.
A space should be adding in here between paw and falls.
Characters/Plot: So in this chapter we are finding out more about the strangers and Seb's connection. The stranger is causing so many problems for Seb and yet Seb really seems to care about him even if he doesn't know why. You are doing this in a great way so just keep up the amazing work.
Descriptions: Your descriptions continue to be perfect throughout this chapter, I have no complaints
Overall another great chapter!
Good Luck and Keep Writing
Sláinte -Junel
Thanks for the review
I'll be sure to add in the corrections when I rewrite.
-AnarchyWolf