Don't let me fall

Pretty nice. You do say "hole" a lot, though. I'm sure you can find another word for that. Also, the first few verses are repetitive. Like: "I am in a hole. A hole is where I am. There is a hole that I am in." Okay, that's an exaggeration, but aim for some different imagery.

Overall, very good. It's interesting how your character (singer?) is surprised at the person holding her up. And then, suddenly, she's madly in love and doesn't want him to leave. Good idea. Good job.

Hey Alice,

I like this one Here are some peanuts :

I’m in a hole
I’m holding onto the only thing that I can.
If I let go, even a little bit.
I’ll fall to the bottom of the hole.

Away from the bottom of despair.

If I let go, even a little bit.

I loved it, really. I'd love to hear that some time. Solid all around, but I'm no expert I hate to say. Keep it up, can't wait to read more.

Wow, this was really good. I would like to hear it on the radio.

Edits: Don't use hole twice in the first *stanza??* Is that the word you use in songs, I'm not sure....

And I agree with busboys and poets, don't put all that "yeah na na" or whatever in. Nearly every song has that, so we almost expect it now. And it was kind of annoying--i didn't read the last three or so lines because of it.

Other than that, great! Keep writing... especially if it's good stuff like this.

Teh Wozzinator

This is very good I like it a lot. ^_^

The lyrics, while not incredibly original, are quite sweet, and I could see them being the lyrics to a successful song. The only thing I didn't like was the "yeeeeaaahhhh" sequence at the end, lol. You could have just put the words in like, "Ah yeah na ha"--I'm willing to bet most of us have heard enough popular music to know that those are going to be drawn out, and it's less visually grating.

I liked it. It was simple, yet powerful.

My only issue with it is that you use the word 'hole' at the end of two lines in the first stanza. It seems a little repetitive.

But that was pretty much it. I'd love to hear this song actually played and sung. Nice work.

~GryphonFledgling

I changed the end to make it less confusing, they way I wrote it was probably what confused people.

I like it but i don't really get the end you said the title was don't let me fall but at the end you want to fall. I don't get it? But everything else was good.

Hope to see you around.

SimonCowellLuver

Give me more of this 'cause I like! You good and I like the end, although it was weird.
shanan-cat! Rock your world!

I liked this one.

If I let go, even a little bit.

For the love of God let me fall.

Me like. I want to actually hear these songs. Sound very good indeed. Keep writing i love to read them !
Keep it up!