Young Writers Society

Wow...I am very surprised about how you made a poem about this website/community, i mean, for 2014 standards, this is pretty awesome, i like how this represents in a good way, even to me, (i dont like Wattepad, in my opinion Wattepad is only for romantical and sexual stuff, and some people work dont get attention) so the verse that really represented me was the:
"Now I'd already tried WattPad

That ended bad

And now here was a shining gift"

Other thing i liked in this poem, is the big appreciation on the community, like it is a group of friends (in fact i guess it is), well, i dont have much to talk about this poem, its just amazing, seriusly this should be some like of "National YWS anthem" (since it represents almost 99% of the people here)

I do have to agree with you and everyone else here. Ever since I joined this platform back in 2020, I've read some amazing works, and have been able to hone my own skills. I love the perspectives of different people, especially in their writing. Everyone has different writing styles, and it's so cool to see. Thank you for writing this poem and echoing the sentiments of me and many others on here.

Someone needs to comment on this at exactly the 10 year mark. it is such a nice little ditty that absolutely represents my feelings as well!

Years later, and this still gets loved and enjoyed.

Hi! Here to review!
Let’s just keep right into it!
I would like to say that I agree with you! Wattpad sucks, everything there is too sexual and serious! When I was using it none of my work got any attention! I like YWS because it’s a small community and everyone is so much more welcoming and nicer! I can relate a lot. I hope you have a great rest of the day or night (wherever you are).

Sincerely, Tambo

Hi, hello. This is Ina speaking. I am here to give you a quick comment\review. Anyways, let's get into it.

You're just like me, for real. I don't like WattPad, even my family and friends would suggest this one because it's also kid-friendly. It is also fun learning about this site and finding friends. Your boredom just goes away. Why? Because of YWS and it is fun to learn and get that criticism you need from other people and giving people criticism/helping them learn with you as well. My favorite lines were:

"In between ads for cooking utensils and a cute night light

Young Writer's Society

I read rather quietly

Squinting at the computer screen

I drummed my fingers on my desk, rather keen

Hoping that this site would be good

Little did I know that it would

It was better than any normal old opportunity

It was far from being jejunity

Young writers were everywhere!

Scribbling away without a care!

Now I'd already tried WattPad

That ended bad"

And

"For this site was riddled with quips

From young writers just like me

I was filled with bubbling glee

I know this poem isn't the best

But...I'm kinda obsessed!"


Thank you for sharing such a nice poem. Have a good morning, day, afternoon, or night.

I loved how you put it as YWS!!! So creative. Did you just write it or did you have to think about it
I loved how you set it up and explained the stuff.

Best part, to me, is:
"It was far from being jejunity

Young writers were everywhere!

Scribbling away without a care!

Now I'd already tried WattPad

That ended bad

And now here was a shining gift

My heart began to lift

As did the ends of my lips

For this site was riddled with quips

From young writers just like me

I was filled with bubbling glee

I know this poem isn't the best

But...I'm kinda obsessed!"
You did wonderful, congratulations!

good work *claps*

Nice job! This is a very good piece that captures exactly how you feel about this site. Very good job!

Howdy! very good job. i like how the words seem to flow so evenly and fell into a perfect rhythm. i really feel you captured the feelings of everyone on this site, we get to meet thousands more like us. and im glad i joined so i could read this gorgeous piece of work! dont doubt yourself, this poem is the best! ps i tried wattpad too...it sucks!

Wow! Awesome work! This totally deserves the spotlight Congrats for making it to thirty-six likes! That's a lot.
The feeling had been conveyed well in this work. It's so sincere, every word so honest, and everybody else who loves the site definitely could relate to your poem. Reading puts a smile on my face, Everything was accurate, realistic, and cleverly rhymed!

I love the ending too!
Great job. Getting on the spotlight a few days after you've joined the site? You show real promise.

~Brunnera

I enjoy this poem very much. The rhyming is super clever, and the part about Wattpat was super funny. Great job on this work, 1morestupidlovesong (username=hilarious). Keep it up, earn more features!

Hahaha oh wow xD Yes I must agree with you. Wattpad is quite lame compared to this site. I loved the rhyming so much! Nice work.

I found that the rhyming towards the end slipped a little and didn't flow as good as the beginning, but the content is fantabulous! I can sense that we will be seeing more amazing poetry coming from you in the future. At least I hope so.

I agree 100% with this poem!

This was so cute! I love that you love this site so much; and it's so awesome that you already have a work up! (By the way, congrats on your first review star )

I realize that this is your first work, so I'm going to try to go through the entire reviewing process:

I see nothing in the way of spelling, but there is one thing I saw in the grammar department:

"Now I'd already tried WattPad/That ended bad"

I'm pretty sure you already know this, but 'bad' should be 'badly'; I also understand that it is a rhyming poem, I just wanted to put that out there just in case.

You also might want to stick in a few commas here and there to slow down the poem.

I do, however, love your vocabulary!

Keep writing!
~liveandbreathewords~

Hey, 1morestupidlovesong! (By the way: amazing profile picture) WillowPaw1 here to review!

Yes! Almost everyone on this site can totally relate to this! I'm obsessed as I'm sure many others are with Young Writers Soceity. It is just simply a miracle.

I think you should throw in a couple commas after a few of the lines to slow the pace down the slightest bit. But good use of the exclamation points! They really live things up.

Your vocabulary is great with this poem, Such as "bubbling glee", "quips", and "jejunity".

Now, at first when I read the title and didn't see it was a poem, I thought it was gonna be some short piece explaining why you love YWS. But boy, was I wrong! It's a fabulous poem. Great.

Then last thing is just nitpicks.

As I spotted an interesting site
In between ads for cooking utensils and night lights

Young Writer's Society
I read rather quietly

Scribbling away without a care!

Now I'd already tried Watt Pad

Hi, Dogsrule5 here to review.

First of all for a new writer and for a first poem, I have to say this was really good! I really think you are going to be a good writer. I really didn't find any mistakes either. Great job.

Grammar: Your grammar was good.

Rhyming: It rhymed for some lines, and some lines it didn't. I understand, because when I wrote my first rhyming poem, the same thing happened to me, and it's pretty simple to do it too. So don't worry about it that much, because I think everybody does it, unless they are a famous poetry writer!

Anyway back to the review!!!

Spelling: I didn't see any spelling mistake, so no misspelled words, great job!

Punctuation: I didn't see any punctuation mistake either! Yay!

For a new writer and a first poem that was really impressive, I think you will learn fast on how this site works and how to not make the mistakes most new people make. Not trying to be rude, so please don't take that the wrong way. But you will learn from your mistakes, like everyone else did or is on this site.

Well talk to you later... Keep up the good writing.
Love,
Dogsrule5

What a true poem! I feel you there. Definitely am obsessed with this site. And hi, it's Em101cats here to review as always!

It was better than any normal old opppurtunity

I know this poem isn't the best

Yes, yes, yes.
And yes.
This poem is so genuine and I appreciate the subject of it!
I think you should, like CarbRundum stated, add a more original rhyme scheme to this poem. Make it your own, not like Dr. Seuss But you did a wonderful job with the flow of the story.
You mention your heart twice in this poem, and I feel you should take one of those out so the repetition isn't there.
Perhaps instead of "My heart filled with glee" you could say "I became filled with glee" or something like that.
Cute and sweet and awesome all wrapped into one little poem.
Keep writing and just work on the nitpicks and the rhyme scheme.

Great poem! I love how much passion you evidently poured into writing this. Although it had a pretty generic rhyme scheme, it was still very enjoyable to read. I think that this poem could do with some punctuation (a criticism I give to all poems without punctuation. Nothing personal.) I like your diction and how you rhymed without it feeling forced (except maybe using the word ''jejunity''). I liked this poem for its sincerity and how it really came from the heart.