If we are going to write our names
on a piece of memory to store it forever
Lets etch it on something we treasure.
Look at all the beautiful days
that we have spent together,
That filled up all of our hearts with your memories.
Numerous people come and go,
It is a part of our life.
Some of them etch themselves
in our hearts and memories, some just pass by.
I will surely miss you
and the moments that
we have spent together.
To go on through tomorrow
we seem to have left them behind the door.
But we got to meet a wonderful angel.
Going on our separate ways,
leaving us behind,
It is not the end.
We will forever remain friends.
We have photos of all of us and
We have shared many things
And they will forever remain
in our memories to shine,
just like your smile.
The school, the classroom,
even you are not with us
let us look up to the same sky
and remember those days of happiness...
If you will tell us that you love us
we will tell you that we all
love you very much, thrice!
Make sure you did not forget anything
we will always be with you.
You will surely meet again someday....
This is a very emotional, very real poem and I like that.
The poem could be more specific and have more detail around the middle, to help the reader connect with the poem more
The first stanza is really beautiful and has a lot of truth in it. I love that first stanza. That first stanza is a lot better than the rest of the poem; that first stanza sticks with you. It doesn't gain the same quality and feel until the last few stanzas and even then not as much as the other ones are.
I love the last line too though, especially that pronoun, you. You will surely meet what again someday? Us? Someone else, like us maybe? It's unclear and I love that, it's the type of abstractness that works well in poems.
I didn't mean to be harsh; I like this poem and I love that first stanza. I hope this review helped though, and I hope that you have a merry Review Day and a happy New Year's.
-tgirly
Hey again! I'm glad I get to read another one of your poems!
But rhyming poems can be really difficult.

I thought it was cool how the beginning rhymed. You started to have something going when you used 'together, treasure, forever' but I think you quit the rhyme scheme after that. If you really wanted to make this poem something memorable, you could break out your thesaurus and get the whole thing to rhyme
I think this poem definitely has a nice message, that the memories you spend with certain people will remain forever and you should cherish them. It reminds me a bit of the musical Wicked. My favorite song in that musical has the lines "because I knew you, my life has changed for the better."
Now, I think there are a few things you could fix besides the rhyme scheme. Take this line for instance:
Look at all the beautiful days
that we have spent together,
That filled up all of our hearts with your memories.
It's a bit confusing. Why would her heart be filled with his memories? (I'm assuming it's a boy and girl)
To go on through tomorrow
we seem to have left them behind the door.
But we got to meet a wonderful angel.
It's unclear who 'them' is referring to in line 2
And they will forever remain
in our memories to shine,
just like your smile.
Again, who is 'they'?
If you will tell us that you love us
we will tell you that we all
love you very much, thrice!
And here, who is the narrator talking to? Who is 'you'?
So, there is a little confusion here, but nothing that should be too hard to clarify! If you be a little more specific, it would get your message through more clearly
Keep writing!
Sorry for the mistake in one of the lines but the last line is:- "we will surely meet again someday...."