Young Writers Society

I LOOOOOVE this poem lol. It's cute and flowery like spring; I can see why you titled it the way you did. I do believe, however, that anything is one word, not two.

So the first stanza is easy enough to understand and the speaker does a fantastic job of describing how she's feeling. She's saying that she doesn't need her heart to love anyone else, but she doesn't want anyone to look inside of her heart because of how plainly everything is written there; everything that she just wants kept to herself.

The second stanza she describes how a guy can love her, and that's all well and good for she'll love him too, just like how she loves everybody (like how spring loves everybody, and everybody loves spring, and vice versa), but she can't promise that she'll stick around, besides when she is around during spring time.

Third stanza, the speaker shows that she has little selfishness when it comes to love. She doesn't mind giving her heart away, perhaps she's used to men taking her heart, but she doesn't want anyone else's heart in return. She doesn't want the responsibility of having someone in love with her.

Last Stanza she says that she can only do what she is allowed to do. This shows that this girl is not only selfless, but has accepted that she has very little control over her own life. She goes merely where she is told to go by fate, or rather, where she is destined to go. She wishes the best for this boy who loves her, and she promises that when she comes back, they'll watch the clouds together. But this is all she can give.

Amazing! I like your rhymes. Goooodjooob

-The Phantom.

I am a little confused at who is speaking. At first, I thought it was 'Spring' itself and then you referred spring when it was talking so I don't follow. However, it was very well done along the lines of the whispey and free aspects and longing for companionship and comfort from another. keep going!

I love the story in this!
It was kindof hard to read through, I would suggest you try and focus on a bit more rhyming. I like that this poem sends a strong message, but you should think about your words too. If you get/look up a Thesaurus, it helps a lot if your stuck or just need an Idea.

Good Job, and Keep Practicing!

~Rainn

Hello there!

I liked this poem but it was hard to read for me. I understood but not everything flowed into one thing, in my opinion.

I also suggest you work on your diction. You have talent of writing but I think this piece could be so much better if you changed what you said a bit.

The second stanza was by far my favorite. It's a very strong point in your poem and I do not think I would change anything of that or the last stanza for that matter.

It was done well!
xoxo

Wow, there's is only one word for that!

Well done, the poem is light, airy, and moving, I was riverted to the spot while I read this and it flowed perfectly into a truly excellent piece.
Only few writers are capable of creating a brilliant flow that carries the reader and I thoroughly enjoyed this.

I do suggest that you continue writing poems and litery pieces to exdend your talent!

Well done!

Wow, there's is only one word for that!

Well done, the poem is light, airy, and moving, I was riverted to the spot while I read this and it flowed perfectly into a truly excellent piece.
Only few writers are capable of creating a brilliant flow that carries the reader and I thoroughly enjoyed this.

I do suggest that you continue writing poems and litery pieces to exdend your talent!

Well done!