Hey, I'm Hightop, here to review your poem! 
A storm has just ended,
Even though its still raining.[/quote
I think the words "Even though" are interrupting the flow of the poem. I usually don't comment on capitalization, but you capitalized "Even" and I think that may have been a mistake, considering you look like you're trying to go for correct Grammar, punctuation and capitalization.The chilly winds is blowing occasionally.
I don't think the word "occasionally" is necessary here. It interrupts the flow of the poem a bit. Maybe try something smother like softly, or gently.
The sky is all cleared up now.
This line seems a bit out of place. Maybe try something like "The sky is clear".The beautiful naked night,
There's nothing wrong with this line, I just wanted to comment on the fact that It's lovely and really suits the poem.The midnight sky of midsummer
tries to lull me to sleep.
Another like the last. I feel like this poem is improving as I go along.
hits my nostrils and fills me up
Maybe think of more varied words, particularly with the words "hits" and "up"somewhere very faraway
I automatically cringe when I see 'somewhere', 'someone', 'something' etc. In poetry. We have such an amazing platform with poetry. This line could be improved, maybe with some imagery.She was glowing with sadness
and was up there all alone.
Word variation would be nice here, not necessary, just for aesthetic appeal. I do think that these two lines lose something because they ran into each other, but that's just an opinion.
Right! That's all my nitpicks.
Overall I liked your poem very much! Your imagery was divine. I felt it tapered to excellence, as in it got better and better as i read on. I would suggest adding some more varied words, and maybe a few more comparisons, but overall, a good job on this Erza!
-Hightop!
I agree on what you jave said and actually I have not yet thought about what to put to make it beter but your review surely helped. Thanks.
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