Okay so the lines gave me a clear image of the story, which is good because that is what all poems have to have. So, overall, on that topic, it is good so far.
The last line of the poem or story was a great idea and imaginative way to end a story or poem, so that is good too.
Overall, your story is amazing, and there is a word that used to describe that.
Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious...
Anyway, have a good day/night
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