The yellow roses harvested
In couples by the road
And the speckled deer stand by the pond
Eating grass by the mouthful
And the slapping of their tongues to their lips
Is aggressive enough
To frighten the fish
Whom are being hunted
By the men of the village
That are worshiped
When they return home
For bringing dinner
To their wives and children
Along with Yellow roses
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Hi @Sumgg I am here to do a review on your poem.
I really like how you started this of so much to one line, I like the the sound of yellow roses.What I like most about it
I really feel like this, I feel like this could be a son.
what lines are the best
Well that's some good description here, this line just gives me so much i dear's.
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I feel like your description it is really good I like how you describe stuff, also I am getting really good images in my head right now, every line is some thing new I feel.
So this is all that I can say about this, So keep up the real good poem writing here I hope to read more of your stuff.
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Happy Review Day
I love this beautiful thing.
I just thought that this would be a good poem about flowers, but I got proven wrong. This is a piece of art. I loved the second last line of this poem, and love that this is one stanza long. Though, when you said eating grass flby the mouth full, the was kind of confusing, maybe if you make another line telling the readers what it means, then that would be great.
That is my only feedback on this for now. Have a good day.