Young Writers Society

Thewriter13 here for a review on this lovely Review Day! I love the imagery in this very short piece!
I think you used good word choice in this work, but I feel it needs to be fixed up a little bit. I don't know if this was truly intentional, but this sentence:
"I swear it's true, amidst the lonely abyss of smothering darkness; the darkness that is constantly gnawing at me and harbouring strange, unknown evils; the darkness that pierces my very insanity, my guardian Angelo's voice is heard."
This is very run-on and can either be set off with commas or broken into new sentences. Harboring is spelled wrong and did you mean Angel? Just work on sentence structure and don't make them too long!
Another line I noticed was this one:
"And until; here I sit in fear, while my guardian angel speaks to me."
This doesn't need a semi colon...perhaps rewrite the sentence so you don't have such a weirdly punctuated line
You need to look at all the sentences and see whether the semi colons fit. Are the lines being linked together simple sentences? If not then just use a comma instead.
I loved the piece and can't wait to read more of your pieces! Please take what I have said into consideration. You don't have to change anything if you don't want to (sentence structure).
Keep writing!

Hey, yo, TheShauzer! Strange here on this fantastic Review Day and I have a review for you!
Well, this is my 200th review, so I wanted to pick a very special poem, but I didn't. Instead, I picked a very special narrative. I have to say, I really liked this, though there are some faults in this work. You attempted to achieve a good narrative from an insane person, and you sure did that. It isn't really creepy, but it works enough where it's believable. I also took this as imagery for a burden over your head and a jail cell. No matter what, you can't escape without being killed. The narrator is scared, because they're human. I like the human sentimentalism that gets supported. The narrator sees things, but he doesn't want to. I felt as the narrator was in tears as he suffered.
Faults, what are the faults?

It comes to me and me alone,

a construct of hope

Hey, Shauzer!

This is a shorter piece, which means there isn't much to review, but how much can you really say about an insane guy? Right off I noticed that punctuation seems to be a problem for you, especially since you tend to write extremely long sentences. That's fine because I write long sentences too. However, there's a specific way you have to punctuate so that they make sense.

I swear it's true, amidst the lonely abyss of smothering darkness #00BF00 ">- the darkness that is constantly gnawing at me and#00BF00 "> harboring strange, unknown evils#00BF00 ">, the darkness that pierces my very insanity #00BF00 ">- my guardian #00BF00 ">Angel's voice is heard.

It comes to me#00BF00 ">, and me alone, a construct of hope and pure divinity #00BF00 ">- maybe even imagination?

And until #00BF00 ">then, here I sit in fear,

Only then shall I be free#00BF00 ">; only then shall I finally be at peace with myself.

Oh and I'll be reading the rest of your work, so keep posting!

Beautiful! My first Review and I'm lovin it! Mc Donald's quote lol.