You took me in your arms and kissed me
You blew me away
You carried me when I fell
You showed me the way
To be okay again
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But now you're long gone
and I've fallen far further than before
Because the hole you left in my heart
Is worse than any addiction
Oh, the tears I've wasted on you...
Now the days I spend alone
Are more than enough to drown me out
Out in the cold
---
You saved me when everyone else couldn't
You told me I was worth saving
When everyone knew I wasn't
You took my heart along the way
So when you left, I fell to pieces
---
But now you're long gone
and I've fallen far further than before
Because the hole you left in my heart
Is worse than any addiction
Oh, the tears I've wasted on you...
Now the days I spend alone
Are more than enough to drown me out
Out in the cold
---
And you, you left me hanging from the willow tree
Our little place will be the end of me
A rope around my neck I'd hang
And you, can't just say you're sorry
'Cause we both know that you'd be lying
You. Feel. Nothing.
---
But now you're long gone
and I've fallen far further than before
Because the hole you left in my heart
Is worse than any addiction
Oh, the tears I've wasted on you...
Now the days I spend alone
Are more than enough to drown me out
Out in the cold
Out in the cold
Out in the cold
Out in the cold
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HELLO THERE
smile is is here for a review , okay so this piece is so deep and true , it describes well how you can feel when your lover leave it's honestly so touchy .
you have such a nice way /style in writing like using simple words and rhythm and that's why your song flows really good tegether , it seems i can't find any nitpicks so i'll go for FAVOURITE PART :
"You saved me when everyone else couldn't
You told me I was worth saving
When everyone knew I wasn't
You took my heart along the way
So when you left, I fell to pieces " it is quite simple but has a deep meaning behind .
it is a very cool song that i really wanna listen to
keep writing/smiling
smile
hi bitterrosemary ! i was still on the first line and it was really striking. i loved it as a whole. your lyrics are great and i like how you expressed your feelings through those words. keep up the good work
Hiya Catcha01 here with a review!
I love these lyrics personally. They speak a lot and have a really in depth meaning to them. (I prefer songs like that)
It's speaks to you on paper with no beat or melody so I can only imagine what you would do by adding music to it.
My only suggestion and it would be find with or without this edit is when you say:
"You saved me when everyone else couldn't" perhaps "You saved me when no one else could" would flow better. Aside from this, your song is awesome and I hope that I get the chance to listen to it.
Happy Writing!
~Catcha01
oliverISorange here to review (meow meow)
Hello.
Man, the lyrics are something that I would listen to, it should be recorded! This piece of work was worth reading, a bit cliche at times, but still able to project emotion. I'm wondering what genre it would be in, folk acoustic, heavy metal, country? Seems kind of like a LessThanJake song, but at the same time completely not.
A few punctuation slip ups, but hey, it's poetry, right?
Saying that the hole that was left turned into an addiction really impacted me.
Very good, all in all!
Hey Oliver! Thanx for the review. I envisioned it closer to rock.