I was okay
Until I saw you today
You were laughing, talking
You were perfectly fine
How are you perfectly fine?
How are you not broken?
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I'm just not okay
I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile
Every time I see you
You and her
Even after all this time it still hurts.
I'm not okay, not okay
---
I'm coping, but barely
I turn to things I shouldn't
And I do things I wouldn't
Had I never met you
---
I'm just not okay
I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile
Every time I see you
You and her
Even after all this time it still hurts.
I'm not okay, not okay
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How am I supposed to move on
When all I want is for it to be undone
That day in December
You told me you were leaving
But I didn't cry
I thought you'd be back
I thought you were lying
Now all I want is to go back
To December
To December
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I hope you know how many times I've cried, cried over you
I hope you know how may times I've lied, lied over you
I hope you know how many times I've cried, cried over you
I hope you know how dead I am inside because of you
---
I'm just not okay
I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile
Every time I see you
You and her
Even after all this time it still hurts.
I'm not okay, not okay
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LOVE this poem because it's so true. It's like you took the experience of sadness and a break up or crushing on a girl/guy and finding them with someone else its just Perfect. I agree with what sunshine1113 said " love this so much. For some reason I can picture this with a guitar or piano. I don't have any nitpicks for this. I can tell you my favorite part though:
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I'm just not okay
I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile
Every time I see you
You and her
Even after all this time it still hurts.
I'm not okay, not okay
All I can say is that this is epic. Keep on writing!
I also loved the line " How are you not broken?" because it is so relatable. I literally have nothing negative to say Great job!
Thanx so much! That means alot!
I have nothing for the negative for this review. That's the great thing about it. My favorite part was " I was okay until today " . Great poem I loved it. Also I liked it. Bye,
So this is as melodramatic as your username. XD
'How are you perfectly fine?
How are you not broken? '
And that is not a bad thing at all - just an observation. So yeah, this comes from first hand experience doesn't it? You can tell.
'I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile '
i have said this a couple of times today, but when it comes to writing about things that come straight from the heart it might be a better idea to dress up your idea sa little so they appear less blatant. I can relate to what you're saying, but it feels a little bit old, like = every teenager goes through this kind of thing.
You've got a good idea, but I think you could do something way more original with this.
As melodramatic as my username? Lol thanx? An I was actually quite proud of how this turned out. You are right, it i from recent first-hand experience, and it is raw. But I think the simple honesty, especially in the repeating chorus is what makes it special. Thanx anyways
Sunshine here to review.....
I love this so much. For some reason I can picture this with a guitar or piano. I don't have any nitpicks for this. I can tell you my favorite part though:
I'm just not okay
I haven't been for awhile
I barely get through each day
And I'm forced to fake a smile
Every time I see you
You and her
Even after all this time it still hurts.
I'm not okay, not okay
All I can say is that this is epic. Keep on writing!