Hey, this: topic73432.html is chapter 3 of a Sci-Fi novel I'm working on (it's not really classic Sci-Fi but oh well). If you could concentrate more on the character development aspect, I'd appreciate it.
Thanks in advance, ^^ |WaitingForLife|
(Oh, and feel free to check out the earlier chapters if it's confusing to just jump into the story mid-way )
Call me crazy; I prefer 'enjoys life while one can'. ------- The pen's mightier than the sword - especially when it's wielded by a flipmothering dragon. ------- ◥▶◀◤
ok, so I know you said no more than five reviews or you wouldn't do it, but some of my later chapters of a novel I'm working on are getting very few reviews, so if you could read several of them that would be great. topic73681.html topic73742.html topic73817.html viewtopic.php?t=73924 thanks, ---Psudiname
if anyone wants a review, post on my profile and I'll get to it in a couple days.
Okay... I know it's got, like, 20 reviews already... literally, but I want your opinion on it. You're a fellow British person... Your opinion is special. I've also edited the piece since my last review, so I'd appreciate a new opinion on it.
Done Done Done! I felt like saying that because it sounds like: Dun Dun Dun! All scary a eerie like. Anyways, which other fabulous people would like a review?
Someone told me there's a girl out there, with love in her eyes and flowers, in her hair.
By the sweat of your brow you will eat your food until you return to the ground, since from it you were taken; for dust you are and to dust you will return. — Genesis 3:19
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I've also edited the piece since my last review, so I'd appreciate a new opinion on it.
