Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

Fern

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Tue Feb 04, 2025 8:09 pm

Fern says... · Tue Feb 04, 2025 8:09 pm

squirrels return home
in the cool breeze of autumn
there, a red leaf falls

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

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Sun Feb 09, 2025 8:14 pm

Liminality says... · Sun Feb 09, 2025 8:14 pm

There, a red leaf falls
while the autumn wind dies down --
a fantail takes flight.

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Sun Feb 09, 2025 8:51 pm

Starve says... · Sun Feb 09, 2025 8:51 pm

a fantail takes flight;
a faint shadow slips through where
the foliage shifts.

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Mon Feb 10, 2025 8:07 pm

Plume says... · Mon Feb 10, 2025 8:07 pm

The foliage shifts--
each morn, a different season.
I wish time would slow.

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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Fern

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Tue Feb 11, 2025 6:16 am

Fern says... · Tue Feb 11, 2025 6:16 am

I wish time would slow
stay here in this moment of
you and me always

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

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Starve

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Thu Feb 13, 2025 4:47 pm

Starve says... · Thu Feb 13, 2025 4:47 pm

you and me always
are ghosts of the haiku train
till the end of time

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Wed Feb 19, 2025 7:19 am

Liminality says... · Wed Feb 19, 2025 7:19 am

Till the end of time
no sign before arrival
pouring summer rain.

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Fern

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Wed Feb 19, 2025 9:29 pm

Fern says... · Wed Feb 19, 2025 9:29 pm

pouring summer rain
delightful terrible pain
just going insane

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

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Wed Feb 19, 2025 9:35 pm

herb says... · Wed Feb 19, 2025 9:35 pm

just going insane;
barred from what's mine, yours? details
lost, rebound from you.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Wed Feb 19, 2025 11:23 pm

Liminality says... · Wed Feb 19, 2025 11:23 pm

Lost, rebound from you,
the early apple bounces
into the foliage.

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Tue Mar 04, 2025 3:39 pm

candyhearts says... · Tue Mar 04, 2025 3:39 pm

into the foliage,
glass shards of dusk catch my throat;
something else waits here.

I want to review your poetry!!
Payton, she/her <3

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Starve

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Wed Mar 05, 2025 12:32 pm

Starve says... · Wed Mar 05, 2025 12:32 pm

something else awaits here;
in the vale of perdition—
everything fades.

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write

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Wed Mar 05, 2025 12:37 pm

write says... · Wed Mar 05, 2025 12:37 pm

Everything fades
Darkness, enveloping me
I’m trapped in the void

i should be scared if you can read this.

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Fern

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Wed Mar 05, 2025 7:56 pm

Fern says... · Wed Mar 05, 2025 7:56 pm

i'm trapped in the void
you just let me fade into
the oblivion

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off. Sorry for the inconvenience.

WAIT.

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Wed Mar 05, 2025 8:35 pm

candyhearts says... · Wed Mar 05, 2025 8:35 pm

the oblivion
grinds down faces, syllables,
dust in a locked jaw.

I want to review your poetry!!
Payton, she/her <3

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