Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

Valkyria

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Fri Jan 03, 2025 8:27 pm

Valkyria says... · Fri Jan 03, 2025 8:27 pm

its beak in ripples,
the mirror shatters-- pieces;
I sit in silence.

There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude

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Poor Imp

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Fri Jan 03, 2025 11:02 pm

Poor Imp says... · Fri Jan 03, 2025 11:02 pm

I sit in silence.
Isn't that immortality--
Being the present?

ex umbris et imaginibus in veritatem

"There is adventure in simply being among those we love, and among the things we love -- and beauty, too."

-Lloyd Alexander

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Starve

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Sat Jan 04, 2025 12:55 am

Starve says... · Sat Jan 04, 2025 12:55 am

being the present
it is possible not to
present the being

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Rooke

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Sat Jan 04, 2025 10:08 am

Rooke says... · Sat Jan 04, 2025 10:08 am

To be imperfect
is to be what evil don't want
simple and yourself

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Fern

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Tue Jan 21, 2025 3:25 am

Fern says... · Tue Jan 21, 2025 3:25 am

simple and yourself
that is all you need to be
comparison kills

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off. Sorry for the inconvenience.

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theydon'tloveyoulikeiloveyou-

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herb

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Tue Jan 21, 2025 3:30 am

herb says... · Tue Jan 21, 2025 3:30 am

comparison kills
what could have been beautiful;
husks of former selves.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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candyhearts

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Tue Jan 21, 2025 5:21 am

candyhearts says... · Tue Jan 21, 2025 5:21 am

husks of former selves,
silt gathers in their hollow;
roots seek out our hands.

I want to review your poetry!!
Payton, she/her <3

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Fern

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Tue Jan 21, 2025 6:29 am

Fern says... · Tue Jan 21, 2025 6:29 am

roots seek out our hands
roots ground our feet. we're still here
pointlessly yelling

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off. Sorry for the inconvenience.

WAIT.

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theydon'tloveyoulikeiloveyou-

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Liminality

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Fri Jan 24, 2025 7:48 pm

Liminality says... · Fri Jan 24, 2025 7:48 pm

Pointlessly yelling --
one goose runs to the edge of
the empty duck pond.

she/her

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Starve

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Fri Jan 24, 2025 8:38 pm

Starve says... · Fri Jan 24, 2025 8:38 pm

The empty duck pond
Could be a dragon pond, for
it’s empty innit?

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Fern

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Fri Jan 24, 2025 10:25 pm

Fern says... · Fri Jan 24, 2025 10:25 pm

it's empty innit?
the cold heart, where is the soul?
empty and hollow

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off. Sorry for the inconvenience.

WAIT.

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theydon'tloveyoulikeiloveyou-

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herb

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Fri Jan 24, 2025 11:10 pm

herb says... · Fri Jan 24, 2025 11:10 pm

empty and hollow;
only fresh breaths of winter
ruminate down here.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Liminality

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Sat Jan 25, 2025 11:15 pm

Liminality says... · Sat Jan 25, 2025 11:15 pm

Ruminate down here
where a single yellow leaf
clings to the dead tree.

she/her

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Fern

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Sun Jan 26, 2025 7:22 am

Fern says... · Sun Jan 26, 2025 7:22 am

clings to the dead tree
tell me, why do you stay there
when there's so much more

Time flies like an arrow; fruit flies like a banana.

Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off. Sorry for the inconvenience.

WAIT.

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theydon'tloveyoulikeiloveyou-

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Liminality

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Tue Feb 04, 2025 5:50 am

Liminality says... · Tue Feb 04, 2025 5:50 am

When there's so much more
grass in the open dancing,
squirrels return home.

she/her

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