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Wolf
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Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:19 am
Wolf says... · Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:19 am
Jared, you are amazing.

*self-conscious*

You really, really don't have to critique this. It's just that if you want more pieces to review...

Breaking Storm

:}

Cheers,
Camille
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Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html
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Lady Sydney
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Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:27 am
Lady Sydney says... · Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:27 am
Thank you sooo much for posting this! I was getting desperate. >.< lol I have a poem for you. It's the first in my "Seven Deadly Sins" series.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic25161.html Not sure how to make the linky thing into my own words. Sorry. :? But here 'tis!

Enjoy!
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PerforatedxHearts
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Fri Feb 01, 2008 1:49 am
PerforatedxHearts says... · Fri Feb 01, 2008 1:49 am
It's called "The Kids Want CALAMITY!"

Linky:

topic25344.html
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Lady Sydney
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Thu Feb 07, 2008 9:01 pm
Lady Sydney says... · Thu Feb 07, 2008 9:01 pm
Hello again. ^_^ I have another piece for you, if you need to add more to your count. It's the second poem in the Seven Deadly Sins series; it's Vanity.

Read and rip as you wish! ^_^ Thanks in advance.

~*Sydney*~

Link: post300879.html?highlight=#300879
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Emerson
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Fri Feb 08, 2008 12:25 am
Emerson says... · Fri Feb 08, 2008 12:25 am
I want more thoughts. XD


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Jasmine Hart
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Fri Feb 08, 2008 3:50 pm
Jasmine Hart says... · Fri Feb 08, 2008 3:50 pm
I'd love one on this, if it's not too much trouble, but don't worry if you don't have the time.
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onceuponatim3xo
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:24 pm
onceuponatim3xo says... · Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:24 pm
Omg, you're soooo awesome!

If you could these that'd be really really nice! :D

(Spelton Academy Ch. 1)
topic24068.html

(Spelton Academy Ch. 2)
topic24134.html


Thank you sooo much!!
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deleted6
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:30 pm
deleted6 says... · Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:30 pm
Great, I wouldn't mind one or two.

I would like a critque for Chasing Rainbows Chapter 1 Revised
topic25776.html

And

The Voyager: From Death to Life
topic25398.html#

I'll appreiacte it. Thanks a million.
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BigBadBear
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:31 pm
BigBadBear says... · Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:31 pm
K, thanks everyone.

I will be doing these tonight and if I don't finish I'll do it tomorrow.

Thanks a bazillion for posting these links!

BBB
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Would love help on this.
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Aedomir
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:26 pm
Aedomir says... · Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:26 pm
Hey! Are you still doing these? If so, it would be great if you could crit The Immortals #8. It follows on from the one I put in the advanced critics forum. Its not very long but its my personal favourite. No deaths, just Aedomir lying under the midnight stars lol :-D

You're great! I must catch up on StoweAway!

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Julia J
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Sun Feb 10, 2008 7:51 pm
Julia J says... · Sun Feb 10, 2008 7:51 pm
Hey! I'd really appreciate it if you read my prologue to my currently untitled story.

topic25635.html

Thank you (:

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StellaThomas
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Thu Feb 14, 2008 9:59 pm
StellaThomas says... · Thu Feb 14, 2008 9:59 pm
If you like, I'd adore you forever if you gave me a crit on this:

topic25922.html -it's the first part of a fairytale retelling (the version of the Little Mermaid where she tries to kill the prince and princess then kills herself at the end). But honestly, don't feel obliged!
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I say Wolf, for all wolves are not of the same sort; there is one kind with an amenable disposition – neither noisy, nor hateful, nor angry, but tame, obliging and gentle, following the young maids in the streets, even into their homes. Alas! Who does not know that these gentle wolves are of all such creatures the most dangerous!
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