Sushi Critic

Salutations and welcome to Sushi Critic! I will critique anything except for:
poetry (I can but I don't like to)
lyrics (you will hate me, I promise you that)
non-fiction (I tend to get bored)
super mushy romance (with duper mushy things)

Fan fiction will be accepted as long as you tell me what your story is based off of.

If you are to ask for a review it would be nice to
1. start from the beginning of your story or series.
2. give me a brief summary of your story or what it's about.
3. Tell me what you specifically want reviewed (i.e. grammar, plot, etc.) if anything.
After all this is done just paste a link and I shall get to you asap!
(P.S. I tend to be very strict so tell me whether you would like full criticism, half or just to some advice for in the future)

I need a review ASAP! I have my exams tomorrow, and I need help with developing my writing. If you could review this before this evening, I'd be super happy! work.php?id=101795

bobbywalker wrote:I need a review ASAP! I have my exams tomorrow, and I need help with developing my writing. If you could review this before this evening, I'd be super happy! Practicing for exams - The Wife

Sorry I wasn't able to get it done on time. I hope that my review helped though.

So I was wondering If you could review my work. So far I have one chapter done with my book "Highway to Inferno." Here is a synopsis:

A professional serial killer who is also a trucker named Douglas Macintyre targets couples in areas where highways exist and where sheriffs don’t. He follows a path of murdering and brutally torturing innocent couples and leaves a mysterious path. Jason Parkers, an FBI agent in the training academy gets recruited by special FBI agent Jonathan Houston after the remains of Nate Cornell were found near a highway. His fiancé is still reported as missing. Jason Parkers and Jonathan Houston are determined to track down Douglas Macintyre’s path of murders and to find Nate’s fiancé before she is murdered too.

I need a little bit of advice on grammar. I also need to know, would it be more suspenseful if the book didn't reveal the killer's identity that's traveling with Nate and Audrey or would it be more suspenseful If the book already revealed the killer's identity in the beginning?

@MrTilgen - Sure, I'll get to that right away. Look for a PM (personal message) about my opinion on the suspense thing.

It's not a novel, just a short poem I came up with. It would be massively appreciated if you could check it out and share your thoughts. Thank you so much in advance!

A Short Poem

@ArtStyx - I'll do my best

Hey
I was wondering if you could review my piece here: The Past (1)

I'd like some feedback so that I can use it when I continue. You can just go all out on the review. Grammar, suggestions, etc.

Thanks!
Sarah

@singingwriter1673 - Got your message. Might take a little while since Review Day is coming up and all, but consider your piece done once the month is out! ^_^
Sushi

Thank you!

Hi! I was hoping you could give me a review on Fallacy? It's two chapters that I posted and it's a bit long but please don't be discouraged by it? hahaha I would really appreciate it!

@Yazi - I shall as soon as review day comes around. Is there anything in particular that you want reviewed?

It's called Fallacy Thanks so much!

@Yazi and @singingwriter1673 - finished them both, hope my reviews help!

Hello! I would very much appreciate a critical review for my ongoing story, A Week for the World.
Plot criticism would be very helpful.
A Week For the World: Day 1 :Part 1
The quick summary is: Desmond is our cynical protagonist, and Armageddon's coming in a week. I'm sorry I don't want to give too much away.